visons softly melt
slate grey sea now far from view
blinded by fresh snow
In a list
A contest entry
- ♥ Haiku Mania ♥ by Freak-in-BlackJeans.
800 points, ended December 16, 2008, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - snow haiku by piccola.
700 points, ended December 23, 2008, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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a good piece of poetry, ah fresh snow is nice, fluffy and soft, then it twists into black ice a lot of the time.
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my humble thanks and a grin!
now I am waiting for the final snow, more predicted for tomorrow enough already
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Oh yes, I like this one too! I think the middle line was the strongest - smoothly flowing and very visual.
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my humble thanks
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Very nice image.
I like the way you describe the sky; slate grey sea... The north is getting their own blinding. Wonderful.
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ah yes my friend
my thanks, it has been a Yule that will not be soon forgotten
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Wonderfully concise and complete! Reminded me of the farm where I grew up, with the lake just down the hill; it was always lost when it snowed -- just another field. A great write.
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yes I am blessed
my lakwe and my rocky sea. trees and pastures, truly blessed I am
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Beautiful!!! i would love to see things through your eyes dear !!!!
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ah
but I think we share some similar views
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good job all around! thank you for entering.
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My humble thanks
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Beautifully done!!!
I'm learning so much from you about Tanka & Haiku... Thanks...
Great imagery & narrative...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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ah my friend you are too kind
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Can't beat the first snow of the season. Still waiting for some snow here where I am.
As always, nice write
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thanks
the snow is gone for now, but not for long I fear
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Snow is foreign material to me. My home doesn't see snow at all and the sea is three or four hours away. Yet I love the snow covered landscapes I have seen. First snow would be a magical thing to view. An excellent poem with the haiku chain speaking volumes.
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thanks
first snow is magic after a while it gets a bit much but I have always loved a good storm
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Beautifully written, descriptive, calm and peaceful somehow. I loved it.
small typo in the final stanza - 'fields'
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my humble thanks
for the comment and the heads up
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While I must confess I am no fan of the haiku, this is a most fine and wonderful poem, and I do love it so! bravo!
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Namaste
my friend again you are much too kind,, but thanks you
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