It's like this..
I 'rubbed the bottle' n' poof!
She appears out nowhere
With sweet n' soft caresses,
Coupled with words she expresses
The thoughts that take you there
I'm lavishing praise, so astonished by her power
I'm emotionally intoxicated, n' mentally elated..
as each time, 'I lose the minute in her hour'
Summoned from the gentle rub
My prison he released me from
This mist I am no more
Human form I stand as one
I speak soft words to my new Lord
What shall I do for you?
A single wish? A sweet soft kiss?
Let me intoxicate you….
Grant your dreams, set me free, I belong now just to you
A single wish? A sweet soft kiss?
Let me intoxicate you….
Grant your dreams, set me free, I belong now just to you
You need not do more , I know what you can do
This is why in this ink, I'm blessed by you
I'm lavishing on praise, so astonished by her power true
this time, 'I lose the minutes by 2 in her hour's view
I'm emotionally intoxicated, n' mentally elated..
With pen in hand, so long I've waited..
Your pen I enchant, with grace and elegance
Grant your dreams, shall you explore my Lord
I stop the time so none will be lost
Your ink will always be full,
As I now just belong to you….
As you scribe I will set by your side
Casting dreams into your mind, making them come true
I share my power, for not just an hour
Just to be close to you…
Author notes
This is a poem my friend and fellow poet Lisa and I wanted to present as a dedication, to the love we all here.. have for poetry. hope it brings a smile ..Happy Holidays!!
Please tell me what you think
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A lovely, seamless collaboration. Well done, i like
Thanks for sharing, you two work well together.
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thank you
yes, i agree but sadly my friend has long since left me to fend for myself!
i'm ever hopeful she will return and that we can once again create some magic..thank you kindly my friend it is truly appreciated ..
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What a cool idea for a collaboration! The genie in the bottle. love this line..."as each time, 'I lose the minute in her hour' ". And her "let me intoxicate..." Your ink blends well here, you must do more? =)
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thank you
wow, you found one of my favorite collabs!
you're so very sweet to me i appreciate it so much, and yes i think me and Lisa work well together too..unfortunately we haven't been in contact in a long time, i think she went on a haitus..but yes she's so sweet and so talented..maybe we can do something again at some point in the future, who knows?
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How I love the flow of this you two work well together lovely dedication too I think we all in love with her . Great job to the both of you
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sorry..
somehow i've missed your comment for this long..my bad..but i thank you profusely my friend for all your wonderful support, and yeah..we all do love our lady..'poetry' huh?
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Terrific Poem
I do love Poetry, as you do.
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thank you
i appreciate that you do..and so does my co-inker..we both thank you sir for your kind words..
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A nice dedication and a lavishment of praise for your fellow writers, enjoyed
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thank you!
didn't see this til now..sorry, but i'm pleased you found this to your liking my friend, the two of us thank you..
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Sweet.
Swims with the love for the word.
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sorry i'm just..
discovering this comment..i appreciate your sweet comment my friend..the two of us truly appreciate your wonderful comment!
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Just lovely dedication in the fullest stature I know you man. Lovely I say. Tony
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thanks!
my friend, it's a pleasure to see you visit as always and i'm happy you found this piece to so enjoyable..if you haven't already checked out the lady who penned this with me, i recommend you do..i think you'll like her work.
from the both of us thanks again sir!
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I had fun reading that one, thanks
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thank you
this was a collaborative effort by one of my wonderful friends, who is certainly a 'poetic' force to be reckoned with..
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Wonderful collaboration, makes me want to sing.
I think there couldnt be enough of this one, it's truly beautiful.
Love,
jin
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somehow i misssed this comment..
and i apologize profusely my sweet Jin! glad you liked this piece though, it felt like we had a nice coming together of talents i believe..and by your remarks i guess i was right! so from the both of us, THANKS!
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Simply STUNNING !!
What a great pair of minds, to have come up with something thats just flows like smooth honey
Impressive, Ticks all the boxes
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wow! very sweet words..
We thank you so much for commenting on this piece and we are so pleased you found it enjoyable..
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awesome words... emotional and heartfelt... love to read your scribes...! amazing ... they jump off the screen...
becca
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Wow
my sis..all those 'screen' jumping words you referred to?? tell then get back here this instant!! l.o.l. we ain't got all night.. l.o.l. this is a wonderful comment,. thank you loads!
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Yes, it did bring a smile to my face tonight! I sure needed it too! What a great job! I would never have thought this a collab, if I hadn't seen it marked as such!
and love my Sweet Friend
Nyetta
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I love this piece its truly very beautiful!!!! You did an absolutely lovely job on this piece its very well written!!! This is truly gentle and so sweet!!! I can tell that you truly love ur friend!!! You did an incredible job!!!!!!!!!
It!!!
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loved this the first time I visited, your words as always, bring love & joy to a reader. Beautiful collab friend. Thanks for my morning read..
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I so loved the metaphor of this genie inside the pen, playful and charming song it sings to the heart and mind. Where would we be without the muse?
Superb blend of ink, Let it flow on and on Poet and Poetess
Many blessings, Sandi
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Thank you
We had hoped this would be recieved as at least decent but all the praise we've gotten just makes all the more a pleasure to have penned this and brought smiles to so many..from the both of us..THANK YOU..
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amazing collab. It definately made me smile and its warmth is felt through out the entire write. Well done to you both!
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aaww..
from the two of us..thanks so much! it's appreciated my friend..
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aww...this is awesome!
"As you scribe I will set by your side
Casting dreams into your mind, making them come true..."
this is absolutely beautfiul
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thank you
I see you've stumbled upon my collaboration piece with my dear friend Lisa..glad that you found it enjoyable my new friend!
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BRAVO! This was amazing. You both did so well. This piece never lost a beat. Thank you for sharing. ~~Iridessa MoonFlower~~
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Thanks!
We never thought this piece would be this well recieved by we are very grateful that it was! glad u enjoyed and hopefully this isn't the only piece me and Lisa pens..
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I don't know how I missed this one dear man, afterall, it is at the top of your collection.
Sleeping I guess. LOL
There's plenty evidence of adoration in this lyrical work of moving words. You, and Lisa have performed superbly together. The silky flow, and my ability to relate to every word surely brought a smile to my face, and sparked my spirit, leaving me with a warm afterglow.
You know firsthand that I love collaborations here at AP. The caliber of talent on this site makes it easy to find another poet who can easily finish our sentences, and work well in joint efforts to construct something as delicate, and beautiful as this melodic poem.
SPLENDID WORK, BOTH OF YOU!
Much LOVE & Many Blessings ♥
Renee
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thank you
my dear you know how i feel about you, your work and your wonderful comments..so so it's no surprise that i'm very pleased you enjoyed this and also see that my friend lisa has a very skilled pen as well!! the both of us thank you..in bunches!!
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"As you scribe I will set by your side
Casting dreams into your mind, making them come true
I share my power, for not just an hour
Just to be close to you..."
This would make such an awesome song A fantastic and heart-felt collaboration by you two very gifted poets. Unless you didn't know already, I'm a sucker for rich description and imagery a rare and splendid talent both you and Lisa use to your advantage. I envy such sensual beauty woven into words...Excellent job.
~ Ink XOXOXOXOXOXO
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thank you
wow, what a great great compliment! I thank you from the both of us, and i'm certain you could do just as well..i've seen the power your pen holds lady!
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my wish
I wish for more poems from my talented friend,
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aaww..sorry missed this..
What a truly sweet thing to say! well since this post, you wish came true!! i've written more! thank you so much for all your support my friend!
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this is brilliant, full of emotions...your poetry is addictive my friend....LOL
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like that! thank you so so much my wonderfully supportive friend, i'm glad you like can't take full credit though i had the amazing pen of my poetic 'genius in ink' help me on this! (lisa).
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What a wonderful collaboration Swan, your pen never fail to show the best. And this is great collaboration for sure..you really did a fantastic job with your friend. Best of luck guys
Amarige
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thank you
i'm very pleased you liked this write my sweet friend, thanks from the both of us.
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I'm so intoxicated i might brabble!
What a beautifull poem! The first time i read through it i found it beautifull, the second time it became precious.... Like so many facets to a genie in a bottle so many poets abound! I think my personal genie's name would be HOPE! Thanx for this gem.....
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wow
such a wonderful compliment, from the both of us..thank you!
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Your pen I enchant, with grace and elegance
Grant your dreams, shall you explore my Lord
I stop the time so none will be lost
Your ink will always be full,
As I now just belong to you….
That's just beautiful. A stunning write through and through. BRAVO! -
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Thank you very much Paloszoo..It was so easy to write with Swan, he can become one's muse when joining him in such a collaboration, almost as if he was leading in a dance and it beckons a lady to follow in his embrace.
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thank you!
so pleased you liked this my friend, and we appreciate your wonderful comments!
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You changed the genie from the ink into geni-us, great write, we all need one of those bottles at times to keep on righting the writes...~~Artis
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Thanks!
Actually, it's a us but I'm absolutely pleased you liked this work, it happens to be a favorite work..I truly appreciate the kind words and the time you took to read this piece from the two of us.
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Awe... this is so sweet. Your gift with words and phrases is evident here.
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thank you
I really really am happy to see you back on my pages again!! yeah!! this is actually a collaborative effort with my excellent poetic pal..Lisa(donchaquestionme)she is a must read.
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nice holiday card , Thank you very much it is lovely.
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thanks
I appreciate your sweet comment my friend, and myself and my co-collaborator are thrilled you enjoyed this write.
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can you imagine beaming em up scotties for the sake of pleasure, erm, erm, I'm a moderator now, so, I better behave myself, but there is no deceiving who could have written such a piece. and you use a well known word, I use freuquently, - wow, scribe, I'm in high esteem of wroshipping not only your work, but you get umpteen more comments than I do, very well done.
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Thank you
we appreciate the kind words and support fellow scribe.
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Lovely write here
Enjoyed the works of ths piece and I am sure she did as well
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thanks
we both appreciate you reading and commenting on this collaboration of ours ,glad you enjoyed it.
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Beauty~
Excellent collab You two and Love the emotion also images that come through~
Wonderful weaving of words
Bravo!!
Touches deep~ Woot!!
Flowed so well together- blended naturally
Keep that quill dancing
Thank You for sharing Your Talents and Spirits~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Souls
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Thanks!
Many thanks actually you have very graciously lavished praise on us and I can't express enough how much it is appreciated my friend.
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All of you are too kind-- thank you, to you all..
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Bravo...
A very nice piece of collaborative effort and flow. Congrats you two! We are all here for our love of writing; our love of poetry - what an inspiring feeling here. And I enjoyed the creativity of this piece as well. Nice colored blends too; great for my love of asthetics...
AsIThink...
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yeah..
Thanks for wonderful feedback, we are grateful and happy you enjoyed this piece, and yeah 'asthetics' make the look go wow!
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Bravo!
Excellent Excellent prose! Beautiful in every way
"As you scribe I will set by your side
Casting dreams into your mind, making them come true
I share my power, for not just an hour
Just to be close to you…"
WOW
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Thank you
I believe you found this piece to your liking? seriously thank you my sweet friend, always a pleasure when u visit and the two of us appreciate your sweet comments and again thank you.
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Sweet!
What an appropiate poem for an AP
family that can't get enough of writing,
creating and exploring the endless domain
that is the mind. Perfect baby! nothing
but love for yawl! Pen on poets
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my man!
my ace, my big dogg! thanks kid, coming from an equally talented pen
we accept your wonderful words of praise, and will carry cheesy looking kool-aid grins all day long!
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Wow...this is just beautiful, I can sense the dreamy love and adoration in this write. The genie adds a nice dimension and mystic feel too. Many great lines in here, a delight to read. You guys worked magic together here...alby
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Thank you
coming from the mistress of dreamy sweet writes this is a high compliment! we appreciate your kind words and are happy you enjoyed this write my friend!
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Ahhh, to have a genie...now THAT would be something, wouldn't it? I especially love the first stanza...sigh...and the last stanza is just lovely. Everything in between is like the creamy white filling of an oreo cookie I adore this poem. Thank you, Rich and Lisa. Love, Lane
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Thank you
Yeah, a genie..I often wonder about how sweet that would be! aahh..oh well anyways we appreciate the great comments and I your continous support.
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Wow. This is phenomenal. The beauty just flows throughout the poem. It's really captivating, and I'm left somewhat speechless. BRAVO!!
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thank you
It's a great feeling to know this captivated you.. myself and my collaborator both thank my friend your words do us honor.
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What a great write. It is a beautiful peice so full of emotion. I think it relates to each and everyone of us here. We put our best efforts into what we write to worship the pen. Best of luck in the future
>Waka<
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Great collab - poetry is a god that we worship by giving the best of our efforts to our work.
"I'm lavishing on praise, so astonished by her power true
this time, 'I lose the minutes by 2 in her hour's view
I'm emotionally intoxicated, n' mentally elated..
With pen in hand, so long I've waited.. "
This is a great verse and I can relate to its words completely. You have given poetry a persona and let the reader take the ride with you.
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That is so utterly cute. I like how it switches in between views. The quotes around some of the lines tell the story like it is. I have a problem with the "n' ", but that may just be because I'm OCD. It's written nicely and the flow is gorgeous. The rhyming scheme is almost whimsical. Thank you for sharing this.
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Ah, 'tis a fine write; and that it did. Yoou expressed yourself quite well, and I agree with you. It also reminded me of an old TV comedy show, I think It was called "I Dream of Jeannie", and starred Larry Hagmann, I've always thought of it as one of the funniest shows on TV. A link in a moment , in case you haven't heard of it:
http://www.google.com/search?sourceid=navclient&ie=UTF-8&rls=RNWO,RNWO:2008-24,RNWO:en&q=Jeannie+%2D+TV+Show
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Thank you
Although I truly appreciate the link, it's not necessary I remember the show well and it's an ole time fav. of mine! We thank u so much for your great comment on our work.
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Very finely and very well done poem here! You' ve managed to sustain the momentum throughout the entire poem, with a good candence, and nifty and fine rhyme as well! All in all really quite excellent stuff ... bravo!
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Thank you
Like my partner I like to echo, a thank you to all she is a fantastic writer, and having the help of her pen made me a happy camper!
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A much appreciative thank you to you all--I am glad Swan had asked me to collaborate with him on this piece-I enjoyed scribing with him..
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Lovely words of feelings we all have,
so beautifully done, each line complements the next.
great merge of expressions
awesome
God bless you both...
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I feel the fine fine lined blend
The lid taken off of the indigo blue bottle
And the grand-slam of poof proof
As inspiration along with elemental intoxication
Wriggles from wrist to pen with the muse on
And the lovely Lisa is the shine in the infusion
Two who share the same page
The Pen The Paper The Same Stage
It's a solid harmonic harmony
Happy Thanksgiving
For all the love love love
And for the dance with Mistress Poetry
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Gosh I love your unique style, you are a gem my friend, thank you for blessing our collaborative effort. We are pleased it gave you a smile, we coouldn't have asked for more.
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A wonderful collab. here and I enjoyed the read! Great job you two
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Thank you
Appreciate your constant support my friend and we thank you so much.
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