I cry in silence. Disguise my pain
Each passing moment of loves refrain
I see the future, alone and blue
And watch the Sparrow, flight so true
I walk in darkness and fade to black
Spin in circles. Crawl on my back
I count the hours that she is gone
And think of her ,with hair so blond
I bow before her. Though she doesn't see
And wallow deep in misery
I whisper softly, to she, my love
' How much I love you. ' There's none above
And as I hold her tender hand
I hear her voice. Sweet and grand
And then I fall. This broken man
For she is gone. It's loves last stand
By Robert W. Fox
A contest entry
- And I screamed "I love you" but you just walked away... by August Starlight.
775 points, ended February 12, 71 entries
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I hope this is not a true story. You sure made it feel like one. Beautiful imagery. I love that you called it a last stand- like it was a battle; one which was lost. Best of luck.
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Awh, that's so sweet but so sad. Beautifully written!
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you sir, are amasing.
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Regret for a lost love, yet the pundits say it's better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all. So sad anyway. Written with execllence.
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ah so full of depth its so hard not to feel the sadness reading each line just brings the story to life heartfelf and full of emotions well done
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Touching, heart felt emotions
I walk in darkness and fade to black
Spin in circles. Crawl on my back
loving someone that is no longer by your side brings darkness all too often..bravo
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Tragically sad write my friend, though they do say better to have loved and lost, then not to have loved at all...
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This is written as truth- you know your subject, have felt this, or possess a poet's wonderful, though sad imagination.How much more pain in the silence!
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i am alone too.. she is gone.. i think you write these forlorn poems just for me.. great writing
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Oh wow this is so very beautiful...how sad.
The pain of your loss tugs at the heart.
Thanks for sharing.
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Amazing Poet!
What an incredibly heartfelt poem. It brought tears to my eyes. Bravo Bob
*Hug*
Mariana
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This was a great read Bob-one of your best-
Hilly
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Heartfelt Poetry!!
Sad but so beautiful. I love your rhyming Bob. You are a true romantic. I always enjoy your poetry. It speaks loud and clear how I am feeling myself. This is one I could have written about a special guy only the hair would be brown.
. Thank you for sharing. Blessings.
Hugs To You,
Sandy
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Oh Bob this is such a sad poem. You penned the rhyme , making it sound so natural. And here's a from me also.
Gaylene
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This is a very sad poem Bob, I love the rhyming couplets and the sentiment.
I think you need one of these
All the best...Sue
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didn't go the way i thought it would, but then again it seems like it was the only thing, you hear their voice and you wish you could just do something, hard for a while, keep it flowing
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Dear friend..Ooh..regretfully sad poem..Your rhyming couplets are so lovely...My empathies are with you friend... from here!
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very nice poem, love sure lets a light in our hearts, but knowing the out come is it worth the effort
very sad indeed!
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well done!
This is so well written, you are quite the poet my friend, my only suggestion would be to change one word in line 9, "don't" to doesn't
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SAd....
But very well written Bob!!! You sure wear your heart on your sleeve sometimes but then don't we all...I like your romantic poems and this one did not disappoint , but still really sad!!! Thanks for sharing tonight!!!~~~Toni~~~ BY the way Happy Thanksgiving!!!! Hope you have a great Turkey Day!!!~~~Toni~~~
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this is lovely but some sad Bob also some funny.
I never saw anyone crawl on their back.
smile,
Judy
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A dramatic piece of lost love poetry with a somewhat theatrical feel. I like it, and I have written a few like this myself. There's nothing like digging in deep and throwing it all out there on the stage. Just great...alby
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Oh my gosh! There is such yearning in this poem. I don't know what to say......
For once in my life I'm speechless! Thank you for putting such sorrowful beauty into words.
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Bob... This is some of the most beautiful poetry. Very heartfelt and moving!
Well done sweet friend.
Delila
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Sad, lonely, longing for a long lost love that can never be. Very special poem written so well. Good luck, my friend.
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Sad and yet so beautiful at the same time
Your words are so special my friend, never stop
All the best Bob
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Outstanding
This poem is bitter/sweet and filled with sadness lamenting your long lost love. The rhyme is well-chosen and adds to the effect of the poem and I liked your choice of language. A strong poem that will strike a chord with many people.
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Very sad, but very beautiful. I loved it. Lost love is probably the hardest thing to deal with, in my opinion.
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This is so beautiful my friend. Brought tears to my eyes. This is very sad. Your writing in impeccable as always. You heart shows through here more than I have ever seen I think. It flows very well.
Keep writing, and as always I will keep reading.
~*Lady Serenity
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Wow, this is so wonderfully written. Love the rhyme and flow as well as your words. Beautiful poetry.
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