thoughts delve into oblivion
running parallel with confusion,
trapped in a void with no retreat
life seems smothered and breathless,
doors close to happiness
locking me out of love's haven,
it now lies forsaken
entombed and withering to dust,
memories; my sole companion
do not fade with dusk,
for that is all I have to console me
when nightfall breathes loneliness,
beauty of us vanished
colorless and blind,
while rain falls inside my heart
I hold fast to vibrant shades of yesterday.
Author notes
Pic Prompt-Artist Unknown
A contest entry
- Up 4 a quickie ( abe 1 ) by Abe 1.
575 points, ended December 1, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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a good poem, ah the sorrow of love and life, it gathers us and whips us into tears, and we can only watch it happen from the depths of an ache.
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Wonderful
Very creative and so well done. Thank you for sharing.
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This is such a sad piece, between these lines is such a palpable sadness. So beautifull done though hun. Best to you
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amazin poem ya ave written ere
luved it
gd luck 2 ya
cheers abe
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Thank you for the kind comment and for hosting a great contest.
Linda
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Oh wow this is an amazing take on the picture. I trul;y can see this in the picture. Wonderful imagery,as usual
Excellent piece indee3d. All the best with this
gaylene
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That is very kind of you dear lady, thank you for the sweet comment.
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Forever trapped in our yesterdays... shielded from our tomorrows. Our own heavy rasping breath ..soul companion in a sightless world of hopes
despair.....Hey well penned you made me think. Luck to you
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As always, I deeply appreciate the support and encouragement my friend. Thank you for reading and commenting..I hope it made you think pleasant thoughts
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Wow, what a beautiful write with grat imagery. I love the ending of the poem. Well done and good luck in the contest
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Thank you young man
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You really did a great job bringing this sad picture to life. You have quite a way with penning some very beautiful words for these prompts. Nice poem! Blessings, Patty
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Aww, thank you. That's very kind. I'm glad you enjoyed the read.
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Oh hun
Your words made me feel so sad so much emotions felt with reading
I wish you all the best
Julie
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Thank you dear lady..I'm not actually sad..just a write to the prompt as she looked forlorn I'm sorry I made you feel sad.
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Poet
Why is it we strive to find love and then often fall to lust. It seems the poet always searches for true love. Deep in your heart it still stays dear poet. How I wonder.
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With love being something we all need and sometimes crave..it's a neverending search, unless we're among the fortunate few to find true love. Then it's time to count your blessings Thank you for your comment, I do appreciate it.
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I could almost hear you sighing...what a beautiful picture you paint of such a broken spirit. I like this style alot...the abscence of capitalization makes the whole piece seem more fragile and hopeless.
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Thank you for the nice comment, it is much appreciated.
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