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Inside the Marble

 


Pretend your hands are my hands, you said,
warm between your thighs...

your touch precise enough, on a 9 degrees
windy night, that I feel as if the sculptor
has outlined in black marker pen
exactly the area of my inner-sanctum and
excised the cold muscle there,
replacing it with liquid fire.

With your hands, I moan out loud,
the map of my body erupting in new countries.
I feel the blood flowing through chiseled veins

in a way I never have before;
       I feel its pleasure-pain and urge you to
Feel my cold spots, wherein you run
your hands across my body, up my sides, feeling
the familiar warm flesh and then
the sudden shift to cold terrain.


I see the look in your eyes,
the way you marvel -
You are always coldest, my love,

               where you are most female!
and I move once more to accommodate
in cool, unfinished anticipation...




















Inside the Marble
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Marble Sculpture by Manuel Neri

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  • zt
    September 10

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    Mmmm...very sensual... You have sculpted in words what Neri caressed from stone. I loved the descriptions you penned. Your opening lines and your ending lines tantalize so..


  • Balldinger silver member
    November 29, 2008

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    so the marble has been polished again? i bet i know how it happened...

    wonderfully written as always.


  • Heart Sutra
    November 29, 2008
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    This is an erotic poem, so I am trying to see how an erotic poem fits with the theme of being unfinished. I can see how it fits with being beautiful but I am just not seeing how this poem ties into the theme of the contest. Having said that, it is a wonderful poem and the image you paired it with is pretty.


  • mani1981
    November 26, 2008

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    great work...really liked the way u've expressed yourself here...the poem is way toooooooooo gud in parts


  • stitched-heart
    November 25, 2008
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    to me it was very sensual. great job!

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