Castles in my mind erected
when the outer world I have rejected,
this fortress where I'm free to be
suspended from reality.
A citadel of peaceful scenes
from life's routine, suspended in between,
where crystals light my universe
and grace of soul is reimbursed.
A rhapsody in melodious tune
beneath my stronghold's embracing moon.
Author notes
Word - Castles
10 lines
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A contest entry
- Pick a word - Write a Poem in 10 LINES or less (C) by The Fun House.
1050 points, ended December 14, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Only thing that I thing I would change in this is having the word suspended twice. Perhpas dangling or even delayed in between? Other than that I think it is an excellent poem. Great emotional content and impressive
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How come this rhyming thing doesn't run in the family Mum? You do it and make it seem so effortless but you still retain a simple grace in your words.
Love Margaret
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Excellent
What a great creation. So very well done and terrific descriptions. Best of luck in the contest.
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nice use of rhyme . . liked "when the outer world I have rejected" and "grace of soul is reimbursed" . . good luck in the contest !!
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