Yesterday becomes
a fading memory,
bestowing feelings
of entropy
upon my heart…
Harsh words,
spoken in haste,
too late
to take back…
Painting such
sorrowful blight
on the canvas
of my soul
as love decays
in a string
of broken promises…
Romancing notions
of heartfelt
decadence,
a prelude
to emotional
devastation…
If I should sing
a mournful lullaby
of shattered dreams
and all that is
forever lost…
Then know
I yearn
my passion’s end
in an eclipse of
eternal darkness…
Forever
blown
on
Chill
Winds
of
Time
And
Memory…
Remember me…
Author notes
Word Bank:-
You must use 5 or more (used them all)
Yesterday, Feelings, Words, Painting, Love, Romancing, Heartfelt, Sing, Forever, Lost
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A contest entry
- Inviting my Favorites by Reptile Lady by Reptile Lady.
875 points, ended December 10, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Great piece. As usual you have a flare for the right vocabulary to create the right mood that spoke to me. As always leaving fertile ground for personal interpretation and self application.
"as love decays in a string of broken promises"...oh my but how often I've been right there.
Enjoyed it greatly. -
how could one forget
Forever
blown
on
Chill
Winds
of
Time
And
Memory…
Remember me…
tragically stunning I like it
and the shiny thing -
Aw Fritz my wonderful king of darkness
I loved this poem
Sad reminiscences of life lost love
The flow was perfect as were your thoughts that river emotions so touching
Thank you for writing for me my friend
Best wishes
Julie x
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A pleasure as always, dear Lady...
And thank you for your kind & thoughtful words...
Take care,
Fritz..................
X
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WOW. Completely blown away.
Wouldnt you figure that when i click random read.. a poem of yours would come up lol but no.. seriously I am in a sudden state of shock and sorrow after reading this. Very deep- emotionally and in a way spiritually. 'As love decays in a string of broken promises' - that line is strength here and "Romancing notions
of heartfelt
decadence,
a prelude
to emotional
devastation…" i am awestruck. Hope you win the contest, you should the flow of the chosen words was amazing. T
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Beautiful...
I love the way this cascades
like the trickle of midnight rain,
soaking the reader with
your passions...
Intoxicating!
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Amazing....
"Harsh words,
spoken in haste,
too late
to take back…"
Oh, how well we can all relate to that!
For a wordbank poem, it is simply wonderful. Nothing in it seems out of place, or just fitted in, or as though it has been 'twisted to fit' at all...... it just flows beautifully.
No matter what genre of yours I read, you write like a master. I may have to start getting jealous.
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I love the depth of emotion in this! Great wording, great 'feel' to it! Excellent!
(and it is not out of the water....lol...it's floating very nicely!!! Great job!)
best wishes in the contest.
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Very powerful write! Loving the imagery here. You have the emotions to a T and they taper nicely towards the final words, leaving you with a slightly haunted feel. Superb work as always hunni, good luck
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"love decays in a string of broken promises…" a powerful image among many. That's what I love about this site... you're always discovering someone who can touch you with their words and images and emotions... From the other comments, I see I'm a late comer
but glad to have arrived. I look forward to reading more of you...
Ken
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Wow, this is wonderful. Amazing. The bomb. The shit, and all those other great phrases. Kudos to you!
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art-attack-cardiac-care-atrophy
mournful lonely lullaby
jump leads please
electricity
i'm on my knuckles and knees
tazer this true heart
to kick-boot-start
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Great Write
Man you capture the loss of love well, feelings I get are warm happy love then loss then wanting to find someone new but then the character finds themselves in their lonliness.This speaks to me on so many levels I am really going to have to dive below the surface and pray I come up for air. Great Great write
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Romancing notions
of heartfelt
decadence,
a prelude
to emotional
devastation
This verse is powerful...yet has a gentle falling rhythm. Cascading along to a soft ending...remember me.I loved it.
*hug*
Az
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