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R.I.P Dude (Prose)

My beta fish, Little Dude, died this morning.
I found him floating in his bowl
wrapped in a shroud of blue fantail
caught between two plastic green pieces
of fake seaweed - I tapped on the bowl,
but I knew he was a goner.

I had him for almost two years.
We played BIG WORM each morning,
a game I liked to think he enjoyed -

I'd wiggle my finger and he would chase it,
pushing his chubby little body to great speeds
in pursuit of the worm that always got away.

Sometimes, we would hone his warrior skills.
I would put a mirror against his bowl
and watch him swell up twice his size;
preparing for battle, Little Dude swam in dizzy circles
and then, BOP!  A head-butt right into the glass -
There! Take THAT you damned blue devil!

Little Dude was the only fish of mine ever
to survive two cat attacks and a drop down the drain.
For two months he swam with half a tail
and a backside with no scales - I kept the mirror
in my drawer so he wouldn’t feel humiliated,
and I let him nip my fingertip when we played WORM.

I know he was just a $4.95 Wal*Mart special,
but he had that 'certain something' -
Little Dude was flushed at 6:43 a.m with love.

 

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Prompt: Such is life

His was a small life, but Little Dude made life at my desk fun -
He liked to watch me type...

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  • Ithica silver member
    January 9

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    I can bond with any life-form it would appear. I don't even like to kill flys [though NOT opposed to suicide by zapper] What I haven't managed to do is learn to write beyond mediocrity... then I read something so simple and yet so brilliant and I am sucked back into the alphabet abyss... Ready to try again! [Maybe I'm just a slow learner...???]


  • motel silver member
    December 27, 2008

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    what a beautiful tribute to a noble spirit. all the little stories about the fish were so touching, so real and ordinary with all the subtle depth. I am glad the emotions were pointed to instead of spelled out ... how can one spell them out anyway ?
    thanks and really enjoyed this write.


  • Sesheta
    December 26, 2008

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    This so so sweet, and funny, and colorful. It's good that even desktop fishes get love in poems.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    December 21, 2008
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    Damm I love your work lane. im back to visit this .
    Joe


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    How it is extraordinary to make something so touching about the ordinary. So beautifully done. My condolances


  • just mercedes gold member
    December 3, 2008

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    Effortlessly the reader is drawn into your world, plays your games with Little Dude and mourns his loss with you. Strong writing, and a great showing of something that matters. Thank you for this entry.


  • Sprite silver member
    December 3, 2008

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    This is very charming and reminded me of my gold Beta, Swish, who would chase my finger around the side of the bowl and come to the surface to be petted. He lived two years and then met the toilet too.

    Very simply written with great sympathy for the departed.
    I like it! ~ Joyce

    PS. I now own a blue named Tucker.


  • Luna Moth
    November 30, 2008

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    i love it. it's cute, sweet, and humourous. it also reminds us that we too can loose a beta fish in an instant.

  • Just4u
    November 28, 2008

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    Brings back memories of a Black Angelfish used to have
    back in college. Looking back it's surprising he died
    a natural death and wasn't eaten by one of my
    frat bothers...

    Happy Holidays...

    Eddy


  • Malabu
    November 27, 2008
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    i'm just a little fish lost in this huge list of your favorates and following...damn


  • Malabu
    November 27, 2008
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    ok...now i'm all teary eyed...i want to jump in the bowl and be mally fish ...for you

    mal


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    November 27, 2008

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    It's always been bad luck with fish . Parrots, geese, pigs,horses, ducks and the usual dogs and cats thrive but fish just sort of mildew and die around here. The last I set free in the pond out of compassion and watched while a turtle chomped him.

    I'm glad to read this paean on this particular morning to a fish, and let us also shed a tear for the Turkeys of the World who will this day jade our greedy appetites.


    Have a a good Thanksgiving dear
    Nice to read you again


  • forty-one
    November 26, 2008

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    Aww... I miss him already! I never thought anyone could have such fun with a fish. That makes me wanna go out and get one right now. You made me smile with this even though it was a sad piece.

    Love ya!

    41


  • csmmoms2
    November 26, 2008

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    Really warm

    We've all got little dudes. They swim in and out of nowhere right into our lives. Always simple don't ask for nothin'. And they always capture us. They might have scales or a cat's furry tales.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    November 26, 2008
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    *blows taps*


  • tomisb
    November 25, 2008

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    Death is a survivor's affair -- George Bernard Shaw

    Blessings and solace. Condolances and grace. Each life passing takes a piece of heart.

    Love,
    Tom B.


  • DolceVito gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    Little Dude sleeps with the fishes, and mermaids, without concrete shoes....Poor Little Dude.


  • Amarillistarshot silver member
    November 25, 2008

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    Awwww....that's so sad! My poor little fish Freddy won't last much longer either. I think we poisoned him on accident... This is a really sweet piece. You weren't trying to be amazing or anything (not that you have to try ), you were just telling a story about something that you cared about and lost. Well done!


  • IronMaiden1236
    November 25, 2008
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    My condolenses

    It is this understanding of the importance of one tiny life that blesses us with divinty.


  • nordicsky silver member
    November 25, 2008

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    How did I find you; a woman with a heart so large that she is able to empathise with a small blue Siamese fighting fish called Little Dude.

    Thanks for such an endearing write.
    Love, Peter


  • HaleyMary
    November 25, 2008

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    Aw, this is such a sweet write, Lane. Sorry for your loss. I lost my dog back in December 2002, so I know how hard it is to lose a pet. there was beautiful imagery in this piece and I think you showed your love for Little Dude well. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.


  • Arafura gold member
    November 25, 2008
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    Little Dude is swimming happily in the S-Bend of afterlife. Great fun to read!


  • BehindTheShadow
    November 25, 2008
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    Nothing to say that has not already been said, so here are some more clappies!


  • Paloszoo gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    This is fantastic, and I'm sorry for your loss. It's never the cost of the pet that matters, but the impact it has on our hearts and souls. Thanks for sharing this poignant write.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    Aww...my condolences Lane, and now he's swimming free in that great big ocean beyond.


  • Oleander
    November 25, 2008
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    awwwwwr that's sweet!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 25, 2008

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    i have never had a pet to call my own but i think that a fish would be perfect for me, i do like this poem that you have written here, just makes me smile honestly, not that your fish died but that you focused on the life rather then the death. not a lot of people do that, it sounds like he lived a good life, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    Happy swimming in the afterlife ocean Little Dude. I can tell you will be missed. Sounds like you lived a good life and fought the good fight.

    This was a touching eulogy for a fine fish and desktop companion...


    Az

  • silverfish
    November 25, 2008
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    so sad. -halfmastfish


  • PerVirtuous
    November 25, 2008

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    Well, I feel that I must force myself not to go for the obvious here and make the usual lowbrow humor out of the BIGWORM game, etc. So I think I will add my voice to the eulogy:

    Alas, poor Dude! I knew him, Lane, a fellow of infinite aquatism, of most excellent fancy. He hath bore me on his fin a thousand times, and now how abhorr'd in my imagination it is! After all, he is in the toilet! My gorge rises at it.

    But ashes to ashes, dust to dust, ich to eeyuck. All things have a season. Sometimes it is hard to tell under water because it doesn't snow, but you can tell if the dolphins are playing it is fall or early winter. It is only fitting that a character as esteemed as Dude be given the ultimate aquatic burial, to be reunited with his kin in Waterworld, where they will bump heads and spawn for eternity, with time off for appropriate harp-playing and burping praise to Cod. He shal live in our hearts forevermore, amen.


  • Jersene gold member
    November 25, 2008
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    aww, this is precious...poor little Dude


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    poor dude...for having a pet quite that long we become affectionate with them like they are like human beings.

    I can't even last a goldfish for two years...I keep buying and my daughter keeps naming all of them as 'dorothy' and they only lasts for a week.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    I had a large pleco called Mick (Jagger...big mouth) who would flip onto his back so I could stroke his tummy while I hand fed him, but alas our aquarium is no more...god I miss the fish...your little tale is a fitting tribute and I'm sure Little Dude didn't suffer.

    Love
    Sue

  • Rowan gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    poor lil dude. That's what I hate about fish, they don't live very long, and I tend to get attached to things quickly, especially things that have the 'certain' something.
    Death is a necessary part of life, but it doesn't mean we have to like it. lol.
    Nice take on the prompt.


  • usefuldistraction
    November 25, 2008
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    Yes, such is life....not to worry, he may reincarnate as a Man-o-war~


  • breedluv gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    Sometimes, when you have a long-term companion, no matter the persuasion, gender, or......species, you hate to see them go. A fitting requiem.


  • daviscth silver member
    November 25, 2008

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    Oh hun...... I'm so sorry about your fish. I've been there, done that. Its amazing he lived that long coming from Walmart. The ones we buy there always die.

    I love you so much Lane and this write just proves what I already knew, that I'm so blessed to have you for my friend.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 25, 2008

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    R.I.P. Little Dude

    I feel your pain. I am here to talk if you need to.
    He was one lucky fish to have had you as an owner.
    Joe


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    Bitter sweet

    We had a goldfish that lasted many years, that spat water out of the tank if you ignored him and got excited every time my daughter came into the room (she overfed him and played with him)

    I hope you don't miss him too much

    Delicious poetry


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    OOHH..

    Such a heartbreaking story! poor little guy!(i mean dude!)he had so much to live for too! I'm for you in your time of insufferable pain Laney..(l.o.l. sorry the sensitivity came only go so far when u consider how funny this write was!!) god you ROCK..


  • Cannonsfire
    November 25, 2008

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    Well too many bonks in the head can do it to a fish i guess Love, C

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