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Melted

Wrought iron melting the girders
flaming in rage.
Twisting tongues poison the spit
foaming mouth breathes empty gas.
I
Devolve.

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  • chilali
    November 28, 2008

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    Wow. What an interesting take on the prompt. Truly a great write! Good luck in the contest


  • Polaja Greeters member
    November 26, 2008

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    This is an interesting take on the prompt - I like the harshness of the imagery that you have used here the ending was my favorite part

    Thank you for entering

    Polly

  • Bob Fox
    November 25, 2008

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    Abe

    Perhaps the anger of akll humanity portrayed in just a few brilliant words of truth. Your making me think now.


  • luna-midnight gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    ooohhhh, i like this alot, it really takes off
    nicely done and good luck in the contest
    Stephanie ♥


  • The FaeQueen
    November 25, 2008

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    This is very good. Nice imagery
    "Twisting tongues poison the spit
    foaming mouth breathes empty gas"
    you have a talent of painting a picture with words. Good Luck!

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