We faced each other,
yet oceans apart.
Our love
was not strong enough
to span
the dichotomy,
of pride.
We drowned beneath
waves of
our own vanity.
And silence answered.
Author notes
Prompt - Bridge
Between 20 and 30 words of quality.
Not sure about the quality though
In a list
A contest entry
- Word Prompt Quickie by Polaja.
1200 points, ended November 26, 2008, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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just revisiting (:
still brilliant. -
Congratulations on the Silver, Gaylene. It was very much deserved for a thought provoking write that certainly hit home.
Love Margaret
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well done on silver,,vanity can destroy. well done gaylene
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"...dichotomy of pride..." Great take on the contest prompt and great poem --- leaves me sad but I appreciate the sadness, ya know? :-)
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The ending of this is brilliant
I love the power that you have packed into this piece - nothing in this was superfluous, every word added to the overall effect of ... well ... drowning 
great take on the prompt!
Thank you for entering
Polly
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this is so sad
i love how you ended it
a quiet, strong stroke.
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Wow~
Oh My~ the first two lines grabbed and left Powerful images
Love how You took this prompt ~
Woot...the last line-
packs a punch
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Wonderful
What a great choice of words. So very well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
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