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build bridge=========




You swim in streams of delight
where as I stream in floods of sad plight

Hail our camaraderie
assailing all our envy ,
build  a new  bridge

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    November 26, 2008

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    I think you mean for "where as" to be "whereas" in this poem - this is an interesting poem - the stanzas differ greatly in rhythm, but it seems to work well

    Thank you for entering

    Polly