To the yellow rose
she whispered farewell,
pressed against her chest,
the heart gave away its pain,
echoed across the empty chambers
like a late summer breeze
reminding the delicate flower
what it would never feel again;
tempted to pull it apart petal by petal
yet she loved it, so she could not,
placed it in its crystal prison
one so beautiful dying inside.
Winter whistled outside,
carrying its notes,
then with gnarled branch
knocked upon her door
while she whispered
the words of the worn out tune;
frightened for emotions still raw
from the icy touch of a lover
homesick for Spring
one so beautiful dying inside.
To the yellow rose
she whispered farewell,
pressed between the lines
of a fairy tale gone awry;
closed the book
but her heart left opened a crack
letting in winter,
knowing warmth would be a prison
for each snow flake,
no different than him;
they too would run
just like the tears
from one so beautiful inside.
Author notes
prompt - delicate
A contest entry
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This was so beautiful! I loved it...
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That's pretty good.
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hi
hi my name is anna thornton-smith and i really like this poem It has a great flow to it I really liked the part
To the yellow rose
she whispered farewell,
pressed between the lines
of a fairy tale gone awry;
closed the book
So keep up the great work and contiue wrighting more poems
You rock girl
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Amazing !
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thank u so much for your encouraging comment!!! I have been so critical of my writing lately- ty i needed that!!
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This is Breathtaking. I love the repetitive yellow rose. Every stanza is filled with an amazing point of view.
Wonderfully penned fellow poet!
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good job
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This is incredible..
One of the most beautiful poems I've ever read.
The ending was so beautiful..
I loved every bit of this.
I think you should have won the contest
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I like how this one ties back together at the end to the initial thought. I really like this line...
they too would run
just like the tears
from one so beautiful inside.
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*sigh*
Gorgeous imagery, very fluttery, floaty, female, girly... loved it. Better than a sappy movie lol.
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Wow, gorgeous piece. The imagery was just beautiful. I feel like there are so many layers of meaning, and so much emotion to this write. Great job, I really enjoyed reading. Blessings! :-)
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oh... I enjoyed this.
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Sigh.
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This is soft and lovely and yes very delicate C
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