I stand alone
On the brink
Of decision
A cold
Barren path
Before me …
Begs my
Feet to saunter
Upon a chance
One glance
Of something
New
So I wander
Through
The trees …
Seeing
Nothing
But snow;
I know:
Something,
Anything
Will
Thaw soon
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Expressing Emotion and Embracing that Which our Eyes Behold! by seclusion.
1300 points, ended December 19, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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I really like this poem. It's use of short, almost haiku-like lines is very effective. Even though you use few words, you still manage to create and image that lingers in the reader's mind. I especially like the last few lines: "
I know:
Something,
Anything
Will
Thaw soon "
It really gives us hope as readers! One tiny suggestion I have is that if you wanted to give this poem more flow, you could try making the lines the same amount of syllables. For example, your first line is 4 syllables - perhaps make all the first lines 4 syllables? Just a thought, though. Good job! And good luck in the contest
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