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When I First Saw You (Rhyme)

When I first saw you
I knew I discovered something new
It didn’t matter to me where you live or what you do
But I was sure you were the sister of that chimp yesterday I saw in the zoo.

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  • kira1115
    June 13
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    It was funny but not really. Not laughing on the floor but still funny.


  • Hihamburger
    June 13

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    Funny

    When I first started to read this I couldn't figure it out but then when I read it again I got it and that is hilarious and is cute!


  • Visit.Me.On.Mars
    June 9
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    lol Awww this was soo cutee! i love it! =]

  • JustAlex
    June 8
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    This made me chuckle!
    Simple, but brilliant write!

    Good luck!


  • AbidoodleCullen
    June 4

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    Awesome write!
    Abi


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    April 11

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    Love it!!!

    Maria


  • Bev Hilderman gold member
    March 21
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    This was very sweet. and funny nice rhyme.
    Well done.


  • TwilightAngel026
    December 5, 2008

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    lol... I read it. I also liked it. It made me smile, and even laugh a bit. After a stressful day... it took a lot to make me actually laugh. Great job!


  • DecorusApparatus
    November 28, 2008

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    Awwww!

    This was really cute! Made me smile and it takes a pretty awesome poem for me to do that haha. Thanks for posting!!


  • spiffyspat
    November 26, 2008

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    shucks

    Funny, sweet, and creative. Nice job
    Jae


  • EmoAngel14
    November 26, 2008

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    lol

    thats funny, at first i thot it was a love poem, but the end made me laugh.
    i like it.
    keep writing


  • DennisP1
    November 26, 2008

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    Just rearrange the last line. Yesterday is in the wrong place. It should be " I saw yesterday in the zoo." That will improve the cute insult.


  • faderman1959
    November 26, 2008

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    This was way too cute! The last line did it for me, a killer finish.

  • superl337sauce
    November 25, 2008

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    That's a great bit of wit there.
    I was totally expecting a garbage love poem xD

    At first I stared, then smiled, and then chuckled.

    gjgjgjgj


  • I Bleed Pain
    November 25, 2008
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    lol oh that was great. That's something that could be published. I'm still laughin' lol.


  • Beauty Of Silence
    November 25, 2008

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    HAHAS

    goshies, this is pretty cute. it made me laugh in the end. keep penning


  • kel dog
    November 25, 2008
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    haha. this is a great poem. great write. 3 clappies.


  • LovingAngelForever
    November 25, 2008
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    Wow, this is really actually funny.... I like it lol


  • lonleyteardrops
    November 25, 2008

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    lol i like this! its really funny, i thought it would be about some girl but then the chimp comes lol
    luv u
    <3 Andrea

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