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Crash And Burn

 

 

 

 

The sun exploded violently

like volcanic fireballs

planets crashed and burned

exploded into the earth

 

they dug for days

trying to escape imminent death

looking evil in the eye

feeling the terror of mother nature

 

tears fell powerfully

hands and feet trembled uncontrollably

as panic consumed every heart

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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50 Words or less
Picture Prompt: http://www.christeas.com/abstract_art_masterpiece_b.jpg

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Comments

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  • aboomer silver member
    November 27, 2008
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    Great imagery and wording! I liked this!
    best wishes in the contest.


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    November 26, 2008

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    Such a riveting poem from the abstract picture...I liked it...


  • Todays Poem Box
    November 26, 2008
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    Sorry. Kind of late.

    Today's Poem: November 24, 2008


  • KayJay
    November 25, 2008

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    Chaos and panic... I could feel the pull of your words accelerating throughout the poem... Great imagery...
    Ken


  • Mariana gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    Well done! A very descriptive poem...I could fear the panic and chaos!

    Mariana


  • Arkbear gold member
    November 25, 2008
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    Perfect editing jeremy

  • Arkbear gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    Hey Big Guy

     

    Truly a powerful piece you have penned here......I would be careful with that one L which has cliche' written all over it......>>    tears cascaded like waterfalls -

    Other than that....I felt a need of urgency via your words.....my breaths were halted as I wondered what else was going to happen......your movement within this write provides a great source of visual impact......thanks for sharing....good luck & God bless you,

    Bear ~

     

     


  • motel silver member
    November 25, 2008

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    I like the imagery of despair in the piece ... the title " crash and burn " is simple and to the point, just like the theme.
    thank you and good luck in the contest.


  • Re-invention silver member
    November 25, 2008
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    wow... this truly is a dark and realistic masterpiece... amazing! totally deserves gold! good luck!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 25, 2008

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    when the end does come you know that is what is going to happen, a mixture of emotion that will soon lead to chaos. and the urge to try and escape ones death, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest.

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