As radience penetrates such dismal grey confusion
overtaking the fierce depth of winters harsh illusion
New essence arrived
dark demise
slowly revived
beauty so serene
new existence now seen
wonders of fresh life appear
colorful luster seen clear
balanced beauty
found
within summers breathless air
mystical stream
captures warmth within the fire
of the suns
shimmering rays
seasonal harmony conveys
Author notes
seasons scape second pic
Still working not finished product! Thanks for the inspiration!!
A contest entry
- Expressing Emotion and Embracing that Which our Eyes Behold! by seclusion.
1300 points, ended December 19, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oh this is awesome
I can so relate to your vision of the elegance of the space about us and how it embraces all who are alive and aware to its cradeling hands
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BEAUTIFUL!!!
I went and looked at the pictures and you have captures their essecene beautifully.
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Even though you're not finished, I found that I still liked this poem. Your choice of words works very well to create a nice image in the mind of the reader. Just one little typo I noticed:
"As radience penetrates such dismal grey confusion" -- It should be 'radiance'.
I especially like your last line, it seems to fit so well into the whole picture. Oh, another thing I noticed in your first stanza: "As radience penetrates such dismal grey confusion
overtaking the fierce depth of winters harsh illusion
" -- It seems like you never quite finish your thought here. You talk about this stuff happening, but you never actually say what happens. Does that make sense? Hm, don't worry about it, because I think it's fine anyways. Good job, and good luck in the contest
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Wonderful imagery makes this poem like reading satin.
"New essence arrived
dark demise
slowly revived"
Some of the lines that drew my attention. Excellent work, Poet.
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