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Transition





In flickering street lights,
whispering respiratory sighs,
lit from attic to basement,
confused bridging fragments,
looks so terribly through tilts impure
watched an unrelenting aurora's demure,
though indifferent reckless unsure.



















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Prompt: Bridge
30 words

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    November 26, 2008

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    I liked the subtle rhyming in this piece - the flow is smooth and I liked the atmosphere that you created - especially with words such as "tilt" and "unrelenting" - some strong imagery here

    Thank you for entering

    Polly