You are a forsaken angel
Next to me in the Dream Theater
Masked as a friend
You unfurl as a volcano
Or an avalanche tumbling upon me
I succumb to your power
Close my eyes and let the
Shape shifter impale my certainty
Of right and wrong
You are a fusion of temptation
Within my chest, my inter-costals
Fill with you, a ripe cherry pulsing
Encased with stolen echos
My desire ripples and swells
Magma increasing in heat
I am passive and you soothe me
A bandage I am lying over
Your open wound
You bared yourself to me
I amassed your insatiable yearnings
Building with bricks in front of your
Bustling, radiant variance
You are solid yet dynamic
Exciting and dangerous
A bustle of hummingbirds in my belly
We manifest together, a tornado of
Secret sentiments in the spacial context
Of sweet misgivings and stumbling boundaries
And yet only a doppelganger
Of the appropriate methods of courtship
We are only a copy of what is real,
A fading mystery never to be truly
Grasped or grown.
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Comments
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my favorite parts were:"Close my eyes and let the
Shape shifter impale my certainty
Of right and wrong
You are a fusion of temptation" and the line, "Encased with stolen echos." i think it should be encase IN stolen echos though btw. but i could be wrong. i really like this! only thing, just to be really picky: i feel that the word inter-costals is too harsh for it. as well as the word belly. it just doesn't match the flavor -
WOW
Super cool, yummy write, highly enjoyable read. Way to go, Kel.
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wow, i think is my new favorite by you K.
"a tornado of secret sentiments in the spacial context of sweet misgivings" wow, yeah one more time wowzers. the eloquent flow of this revealing such tempestuous yearning. very beautifully done. Kudos.
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