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A Freewrite?

I watch you leave
one by one
Im left here
Alone

This empty room,
mocks my lonliness
The exit sign is inviting
But i cant leave

trapped to watch
as everyone i love leaves
no one looks back
no one sees

Indifferent, i am
I just watch
If they dont care
Then why should i?

Something pulls in my heart
but i learned to ignore it
Ignore pain,
im left, cold, in this room

I can do what ever i want
write on the walls
Make music
To make it look less--
Empty

Author notes

well, just a freewrite. Im trying to get into the writing mood, i might revise this one if i have time, hope you likey (i dont)

Please tell me what you think and i know its not grammatically correct, but i dont care

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  • lemonhead
    November 25, 2008

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    Why don't you puncuate and capitalize right? (great poem ) You know 'I's are capitalized... I LOVE YOU!! YAY!! I love the topic, it's original LALALA... Change the title please and IF YOU LIKE IT, EVERYONE WILL! >: D HAHAHA I Kill You!