loss
like guilt
a haunting
presence in mind
sleeping on my back
never again
close to her
silence
loss
Author notes
I chose to write about losing a loved one, who was very close to me! I used the quote:
"and I think of each life as a flower, as
commonas a field daisy, and as singular"
- mary oliver, when death comes
as my inspiration!
A contest entry
- death is but a fine breath by adsaige.
700 points, ended December 25, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Have you ever lost a loved one?
Comments
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Interesting write!!
WEll it was quite a swell writing, who was this pointed to? I'm quite concrned on that...
but yea pretty good write!!
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loved it
the feeling just flows super
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ahhh... i liked it! love loooove the form =)
favorite line: "never again
close to her"
i loved it
it was beautiful and powerfully written
nice job! =D
hugs,
adrilicious <3
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less is more i always say. i like the fact that you use few word. powerful write
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I'm so sorry for your loss. You did a fine job with this one. I also lost my son just 14 monhts ago and he was just 24. It is very black and painful to never be close to them again while here on earth. Best wishes.
Blessings,
Kelle Marie
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Yes I have
this touches home to me in many ways.Been there in the words you write. very good.
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