scrambled letters
collide like stars in space-
unable to carry the weight
of so many wasted wishes.
As they spill
sloppily towards us
with hidden intentions
I know
not even Gods sympathy could
save us now.
Author notes
I am giving you up
for a boy that once said he loved me
and broke my heart
as scary as wrong as I know it is.
[impulse.]
A contest entry
- impulse; everyone needs it by written-in-ink.
700 points, ended November 27, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Sadness and regret are very well highlighted here by the words in this piece. It's put over very well.
Good write.
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but than again, when does it ever??? ... i loved where you took this and i think you are deserving of a trophy ... golden one if you ask me ... anywhos ... thanks for sharing ... good luck ...
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very nice take on the prompt
unable to carry the weight
of so many wasted wishes.
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bleh so true
i think you did a good job
thank you for entering
and good luck
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