a rat
crawled in its hole
and never came out
i waited and waited
true and devout
you were all that was true to me
now i am lost, there is no remedy
you can call me damaged
wrecked
imploded
killed from the inside
dazed
movement side to side
run over by the tide
its too much;
i am compelled
crying alone,
lost under the spell
i am a beast
a demon
this is what has occured
consider us adjourned
for i am deformed
renounced
not able to cope
trapped and covered
in the smell of dope
i mope
around
no plan
for i am nothing
without your hand.
Author notes
"dead visions in your name
dead fingers in my veins"
- Slipknot [Dead Memories]
A contest entry
- Prompt Inspired - Under 50 Words by Exodus.
700 points, ended November 26, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Best Three Pre-writes by piccola.
800 points, ended November 27, 2008, 140 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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nice rhythm to this; I enjoyed reading it. Sometimes in a write the rhyme stumbles as if forced and takes the rhythm with it. Not so with this thank you for entering
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This read to me almost like spoken word. It has that rhythm and cadence, only you can hear it without needing to speak it. Lovely piece.
Unfortunately, it's over the 50 word limit
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