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My Heartless Love

Two years we stuck together,
Slowly love came into play.
Everyone told me we didn't belong,
I cared for you more each day.

Your soft words and touches,
The way you whispered my name,
Foolishly I believed
It would always be the same.

Fervently I followed you,
Held your hand tight in mine.
I listened to your requests,
Even if it required me stepping out of line.

When at last you demanded
I give you all I had left.
I gave you that as well,
Hating for you to feel bereft.

Beneath the trees and sky
Huddled together in the cold
We completed out bond
While a quiet river ran bold.

Things were pefect to me,
Couldn't have gotten better.
I was soon reminded,
Love's just a mixture of letters.

We split up for a bit,
Agreeing to give it a week.
You ran back to me quickly,
I agreed stupidly, meek.

Soon again did we part,
It was exactly the same.
You came running back to me
I agreed to play your game.

I was miserable without you
My love for you ran too deep.
The first day we were 'us' again
I happily sat to weep.

The next day you were gone again.
Better as friends you did say.
I was confused and hurt.
It had only been one day!

Then I saw you with her,
Your hand holding tight
To her skinny little fingers
Nothing about it seemed right.

Months later now I sit,
Writing this poem this dark night
I've moved on or so I say,
But inside I know, none of this is right.

Secretly my heart still calls out,
Hoping yours will respond
I wish somehow I could find a way,
To break love's incredible bond.

Author notes

This describes in my most heartfelt words the love I still feel for a guy that broke my heart apart. My friends put me back together and as I said, I've moved on as much as possible. Too bad seeing him still sorta hurts... Oh well. What's meant to be will be.

That's what you get when you let your heart win...


I used the rhyme scheme ABCB.

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  • trekkergirl
    December 30, 2008

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    This is a very nicely written poem. I definitely feel your hurt and confusion in this. Yeah sounds like he was very confused at least towards the ending of the relationship. He didn't want to leave... but he didn't want to stay either. That only leads to more heart ache in my opinion.

    I always say don't act til you know your heart.

    Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering it into this contest.

  • Quietly Breaking
    December 22, 2008

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    This made me want to cry! The emotion in this was amazing. I had an off and on with a guy that I'm finally completely over, MANY months after our last break up. I can't imagine what seeing him with another girl like that does to you...mine just talks to a bunch of girls but hasn't dated one since me that I know of. I'm sorry for what you went through! I hope writing this helped you feel better! Good luck in the contest!!


  • Megan Awesome
    December 17, 2008
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    This makes me want to cry! I love it! Especially the last stanza, that last line gave me the chills. I can relate to this in alot of ways. My ex did the same thing to me. Running away, coming back, running away, coming back. I hope things start to get better because I know how bad it hurts. Thank you for sharing and entering. Good luck in the contest!!!
    Megan

  • PureCountry
    December 5, 2008

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    Love Has A Memory

    all its own. Sometimes holding the bearer back from the awaiting joys yet to come in life. Be encouraged it is darkest before the day. I enjoyed this offering very much. Best of Luck!

    Respectfully,
    Silent Hawk


  • darkened-sunlight
    December 2, 2008
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    Amazing...

    Is this about.... you know... if it is, I cant totally see you saying all this. I love the flow and specifically this "Then I saw you with her,
    Your hand holding tight
    To her skinny little fingers
    Nothing about it seemed right."
    That one hits close to home

  • darkened-sunlight
    December 2, 2008

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    Amazing...

    Is this about.... you know... if it is, I cant totally see you saying all this. I love the flow and specifically this "Then I saw you with her,
    Your hand holding tight
    To her skinny little fingers
    Nothing about it seemed right."
    That one hits close to home


  • Sandygram
    December 1, 2008
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    Your words touch the heart of any reader who has loved and lost. Some loves we never forget and it is so hard to not miss them. I am going through so many tissues reading these contest poems. Thank you for entering our contest. This was a pleasure to read this afternoon. Best of luck to you. Take care, Sandy


  • Joshua DePesa
    November 29, 2008

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    Great write. I can relate for the most part. Sometimes I wish things didn't happen the way they turned out. This was filled with emotion, and fantastic.

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