Rain
falling
sweeping fog
fragments of dawn
brushing the turquoise waves
softly swirling 'round me
visible old beacon light
rays of sunlight pierce through the mist
a faint film in the autumn air
the twilight breeze shall sweep it soon away...
Author notes
This is an etheree, syllable, 1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10 (Fog pic) courtesy of www.art.com
A contest entry
- Write me a poem about FOG! by poetrandy.
700 points, ended December 1, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Lovely.
A Soft and gentle feel to the poem with great imagery.
I like the line.." a faint film in the autumn air"
Congratulations on the HM.
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Beautiful!!!
Personally my favorite line is "rays of sunlight pierce through the autumn mist" I really like the ending as well. It ties it together beautifully. And the poem really matches the picture!
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My dear daughter...You continue to amaze me with what you pull out of your bag of tricks (talent)!!! You surpass this relative! I have heard of etheree's now you show me yours...I love your imagery..Love your words.."fragments of dawn..visible old beacon light" "...rays of sunlight pierce through the mist" I know you will do well in the contest! Bookmarked!
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Great Etheree!
Very nice! Good work! Good luck in the contest!
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This is such a beutiful piece great chose of words and perfect discriptions!!
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