Amidst the changing seasons all things become of age;
awakened by a warmth life takes on it's identity after a period of time
warmed by the rays of sunshine that transcend this material world of ours;
Spring forth
the dawning of a new birth from what once was a time of rest;
soon gently opening their natural beauty while taking first breath
absorbing the penetrating rays of sunshine while drinking the drops of rain.
Summer abounds
the fulfillment of success in a culmination of a freshness now flourishes anew;
grasses are greener with flowers of every color and shape imagined
trees full of leaves to give shelter to God’s creatures no matter their size.
Autumns fall
the declining of what was most vigorous reaching a conclusive certainty;
foliage on most trees now become multi colored as degeneration takes control
even God’s winged creatures take heed as they prepare to fly from their roost.
Winters end
The twilight of what once was now turns to coldness and gloom;
asleep in the bosom of earth's frigid arms deep beneath the white flakes and ice
all earth is in repose slumbering until dormancy returns once again.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Expressing Emotion and Embracing that Which our Eyes Behold! by seclusion.
1300 points, ended December 19, 2008, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I really like this poem. You have wonderful imagery, and really describe the change of the seasons very well. However, I just found a few problems. First of all, your stanzas seemed a bit smushed together. Is it supposed to be like that (If it is, that's ok, as long as you want it that way)? Also, just a little thing, but in this line: "soon gently opening their natural beauty while taking first breathe" - 'Breathe' should be 'breath'. Also, your transitions seemed a bit quick - I know we all know what comes next, but perhaps you could give a little foreshadowing beforehand. It seems like I picked on a lot here, but it's really only because I like this poem so much! Good job and good luck in the contest
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Thank you for gracious comments and my oversight!
Adjustments were made,to which I agree.
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asleep in the bosom of earth's frigid arms, deep beneath the white flakes and ice
all earth is in repose slumbering until dormancy returns once again.
imagery is amazing
to see throgh your eyes
so beautiful
Thank you, is such a pleasure
God bless you my friend...
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We all seem to see the same thing but in a different light.
I appreciate your comments as they give encouragement to me.
Thank you young lady.
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