Love - a
Strong feeling, so
Warm affection's in fashion
To the epitome of passion
You need to stay and play
Hope and pray
Fasten
Your seat belts, hope
Your emotions will spill
Roller coasters can go downhill
Whipping you across time
Love isn't kind
Author notes
I helped my sister with this for homework, so hope you all liked it.
It was kind of a ricameter but we changed it around a bit.
Rhyming scheme:
A
B
C
C
D
D
A
B
C
C
D
D
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Comments
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indeed love is not so kind and the emotions can be spilling nay which wau they want to.........and if they do they would really be making some mess..which can be painful and ba..good poem i loved it. -
holy crap, you're only 12? this is genius for your age. amazing.
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im not a goof fan of ryhme shemes bcz I have never learnt then,
but it was really amazing...
serene and soft work
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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very good
i liked it... i felt like i was on that rollercoaster! Brave attempt at manipulating rhym. Well done. -
This reminds me of a cinquain I wrote about love. It has the same tone at the end. I like!
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Great poem!!! I like that you helped your sister out. My brother mever helps me, and he doesn't like it when I help him.
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very good
Excellent, very well constructed, and with a strong message with just the right amount of danger...
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Aww ^-^ Cute! I likee [=
And it made me smile ^_^
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this is a really good write. excellent for a twelve year old. thank you for sharing this with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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I forgetted the clappys.
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Yay, Kera! You write good.
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AMAZING!!! <333333 :'D My baby girl...all grown up. T_T Wow...I'm being silly. Anyways, beautiful.
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Very nicely handled, you caught love so well here -
It's not hte usual type of poem that you read about love, but yours was one that you could 'feel' like the wind whipping through your hair, and, for me,
most particularly, the feeling of being on a rollercoaster - always makes me feel slightly sick to my stomach, and full of nerves, etc.
Great job with this one, thanks for entering
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The part with words
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Loved It
Wow, I love your poetry. You could go really far-CORRECTION-you will go really far in the world of poetry
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My favorite part was the poem part! good job!!!
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and what part was that?
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really well done
you are a very clever poetess, this is the forst one |I ave read, think I will look around a bit more
Annie
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Very good write here
Love is what you decide to put into it . But one must never get in a hurry with love or hearts do shatter for love takes patients and commitment respect and careing for without any of the above love often has an ugly face once revealed and something inside dies
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i love the way this flows! fantastic write:]
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It was Kind of Okay, I wish If would have read from in it.
well, it was nice. rhyming scheme was wonderful
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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"I wish If would have read from in it." What?
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This is a good poem, but I think the background doesn't fit very well. I like your rhyme scheme, and I am glad that you shared this with us. Thank you.
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Fasten
Your seat belts, hope
Your emotions will spill
Roller coasters can go downhill
your line breaks are odd.
I don't know what you were trying to do
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It's called a ricameter,
and the line
Breaks make the
poem ending up
In a diamond
Shape.
And actually I think this is my best ricameter.
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Nice
I like this
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Well done, I really enjoyed it I really think it is very creative
I think you discribe her really well she must be very proud
Kera you are one of the best poem writers ever. Honestly in Wicked the musical there is a song called For Good and one line is: so let me say before we part so much of me is I've learned from you you'll be with me like a handprint on my heart. I truley mean you put a handprint on my heart I really mean it!
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A little different from some other poems I've read regarding love but unique nonetheless. Thanks for sharing and entering my contest. Good luck.
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Thanks! I try to make mine unique Thanks for comment.
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WWWOOOWWW!!! this was good!!! i REALLY LIKE THIS <3
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Thank you for commenting
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i like how you stated to put on the seat bealt love is one hell of a rided i love how you put it so short yet to the point.
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loved it!!!!
I most enjoyed the roller coaster metaphor. Fastening the seatbelt was a memorable image, too.
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Thank you, Ms. Tevanian ^_^
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its great. i love it. i especially love this stanza,
Fasten
Your seat belts, hope
Your emotions will spill
Roller coasters can go downhill
Whipping you across time
Love isn't kind
its gives great imagery and feeling in the poem. good job!
keep it up hunn!
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Thank you very much
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your emotions will spill
cause it is true ur love ur emotions do spill and sometimes it is good but other times it isent. -
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Yes. Thank you for commenting
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well of course no love is perfect, it all has its imperfections and downfalls and even though it is that way we still manage to make it through things together..which is an important word here
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Yes of course. Thank you for commenting
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Nice
Love so illusive and yet one is always seeking it. Happy writing poet and I do not expect a response I have become used to it [no reply] here on AP.
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Thank you for commenting
And I find it a good feeling when poets reply to my comments I will start to do so.
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Wow nice write thought provoking love is something very complicated it leads in many different directions!
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Thank you for commenting, that is very true
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Nice. I like it, and how you describe it so wel. If it was me, though, I would think love is described as strange. It's always been like that for me - unusual and completely unlike anything else.
I like this poem
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Thank you for commenting
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Darn right it is!
Wow, nice. You got some hard words in there, which I'll probably never understand, but that just serves to add to your brilliance.
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Thank you so much You even commented before we edited!
But thank you so much, it was very kind of you
~Docteh
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