I caress the abrasive insults,
that are barbed wired to my brain
I savor what’s left of indifference,
as I relish the venomous abuses of pain.
I embrace the punishing torments,
that are welted to my mind
Of evocative pleasurable delights,
yet are harsh and unkind.
… I watch you
as you crawl in dismal humiliation,
to please and I cease this impious infatuation.
… I touch you
as you lay in total submission,
with legs wide open to superstition.
… I whip you
as you offer complete subservience,
under my mercy crucified to compliance.
… I take you
as you suffer endless agonies,
a symphony of moan-a-gasmic melodies.
Masked in blades of steel,
she offers him physical redemption
A sexual haven, ruthless to feel,
releases unfulfilled souls to exemption.
Author notes
Contest: Picture Prompt!!!
A contest entry
- Invite To This Freaker's Ball by lunarlunacy.
1600 points, ended December 8, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dirty Pretty Writes by KelsiEvermore.
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Comments
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This flows really well and it's a hot write. good job..i'm going to read more of your work
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Very interesting. The ryhme, rythem and flow was good but the "with legs wide open to superstition"kind of threw me off. Other than that, it is a good write.
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Eh, very horrid...though in a good way. I like your sense of rhymes and creating new words!
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This was really great. It was soo different from what I thought it would be like. I like the S&M discriptiveness here which gives sight to the whole thing in a view that isn't commonly seen (I've never understood it myself but.... )
"… I watch you
as you crawl in dismal humiliation,
to please and I cease this impious infatuation."
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"… I take you
as you suffer endless agonies,
a symphony of moan-a-gasmic melodies."
Full of emotion and good descritions in this piece make it very interesting... and a joy to read
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you do have a knack for dark erotica
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Oooh, this is definetly a sexually charged write. I can feel a sadistic passion in the words, and the poem seems to go with the image quite well. Like some else has pointed out, I will also say that the line "a symphony of moan-a-gasmic melodies" stood out to me,quite entrancing! Great use of imagery.
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Outstanding
a symphony of moan-a-gasmic melodies.
I loved the originality of this line. This poem is dark and seductive. Made me think of Venus in Furs. The picture made me think of cyberpunk and I liked how you developed the concept of a metal head in the first couple of stanzas. The flow is excellent and the rhyme sophisticated and well-chosen. A stunning poem. Best of luck in the contest.
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that is smokin hot Yotta, got the blood pumpin this early morn.
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http://spiralstudio.deviantart.com/art/spiral-graphique-1-32300204 by graphiqueone
http://gouy.deviantart.com/art/MISS-CONDUCT-44514507 by guoy
http://aegis-strife.deviantart.com/art/El-Infierno-son-los-Demas-64195509 by aegis surreal
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