Tiptoeing around you,
trying not to wake your
demons.
Graceful I let them sleep,
until clumsy I slip
and fall
and your demons awaken
tromping
though my dreams
on overdrive.
Tiptoeing around them,
trying not to step on my broken
dreams.
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I loved the first two verses, they were really well written, and the flow was so good. It was also really deep and emotional. I just didn't like how you ended the poem, it just seemed to stop, and not flow out.
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Thanks
I planed a sudden ending. It represent the spur-of-the-moment of the disaster and how my dreams stop suddenly instead of slowly ceasing over time. -
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Really? That's so neat.
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Yeah, its something I learned about in my Advanced Placement Literature class, how you can use the form or rhythm of a poem to represent different ideas in the poem. Like using short sudden lines to represent something fast and dramatic or using long flowing lines to represent something like waves, slow and swaying. People can even use shortening lines to represent dwindling hope and things like that.
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I'll try to remember that
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