So many dark things
Are clouding my vision
Shadows surround me
I'm trying to find my mission
I don't know what to do
Everything is so dark
Someone please help me
Help me see a spark
Then you came to me
You tried to show me the way
But darkness still shrouded
Me each and every day
You didn't give up on me
You tried and tried again
You forced me to understand
I just had to decide when
I finally gave in
I knew what I had to do
I followed you into the sunshine
A place I know is true
I keep my mind on the good
I don't let those shadows bother me
I am loving my life again
And I am finally free
Author notes
IDK, it's for a contest, and it probably doesn't make much sense, but oh well, I don't care...here's the quote though...Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. --Hellen Keller
A contest entry
- When you have a list of choices, what'd you choose? by my.stars.dont.shine.
800 points, ended December 8, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest, is this poem any good?
Comments
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AWESOME!
It makes me wanna just smile, showing love to everyone.
What a wonderful poem you have here to show the world and having something so carefree .I loved it!
Great job!
-Mandi
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YAY you won gold!!!!!!!!! go you!! lol congrats alicia!! keep it up! love you!
Love,
~Kayla
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Well this does make sense. :-) Nice write. I can relate the the feeling, that's for sure. Like the hopeful ending though. Blessings!
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UMMM
THAT WAS ACTUALLY GOOD....
IT SOUNDS LIKE IT WAS ONE THAT HIT U IN THE FACE AND SAID WRITE ME OR IN UR CASE TYPE ME!!! LOL
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I thought it was written very well
So many fight turning and walking toward the light they often complain of being so sad so locked away within themselves they never give the light a chance but then when they do life becomes an awesome place to be clear minded and alaughter about there is no high like truly living life
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Well aren't we all just a pocket full of freakin sunshine this year! lol I really like this poem. I kinda can relate to it..don't ask how..good luck in the contest ALicia. I loveth you!
Love,
~Kayla
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Would you put the option in your authors notes please.
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