The school is closed
What should we do?
Let's have some fun!
Let me touch you!
My love, let's suck!
Let's suck! Let's fuck!
My breasts are small
But soft and neat
My crests are hard
My thoughts are sweet.
My love, let's suck!
Let's suck! Let's fuck!
I am all lust
You are so sweet!
I yearn to lick
You crave to eat.
My love, let's suck!
Let's suck! Let's fuck!
No one's at home
I am all set
Come doll, let's play!
Come, make me wet!
My love, let's suck!
Let's suck! Let's fuck!
Let's bolt the door!
If you don't mind,
Let's get undressed!
Let's get entwined!
My love, let's suck!
Let's suck, let's fuck!
You underneath
I come on top
My tongue explores
your lollipop.
My love, let's suck!
Let's suck! Let's fuck!
What's inside you
O, let me peep!
My tongue must dig
you further deep!
My love,let's suck!
Let's suck! Let's fuck!
A contest entry
- HOT, SENSUAL, EROTIC! by My Souls Reflection.
700 points, ended December 10, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
An Open Invitation.....What do you think?
Comments
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OMFG!
LOL , I LOVED IT! IT RYHMED SOOO FCKING GOOD YO! LOL
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IF I START SINGING THAT MY Mrs, WILL SHOOT ME!
I LOVE IT
I Wonder if it will make the Pop Charts,
before its banned!!
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I come on top
You underneath
My tongue explores
your lollipop.
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My love, let's suck!
Let's suck! Let's fuck!
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What's inside you
O, let me peep!
My tongue must dig
you further deep!
.........
My love,let's suck!
Let's suck! Let's fuck!
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Eamon
I appreciate your appreciation...
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its crazy good
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skullcrusher420
Thanks for the crazy comment!
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Wow~
Oh My Word You brought forth HEAT in this piece and the reader walks into walls afterwards
Bravo on taking it to the top~
Images tempt-tease aimed to please~
Excellent this is Beautiful~ Woot!
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Heat~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Desire
Come closer, hotty!
I'm looking for someone hotter than me...
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aw. too bad im not a girl. ):
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Philip C. Moon
Wish you were.
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*fains myself* phew that was HOT! and erotic.. such a wonderful read.. Put a smile on my face for sure! Thank you very much for sharing!
Angel
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Angelflower
I can be even hotter...if encountered by an 'angel'...
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Oh. This is very good and very sexy.Wish i could have joined.
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nonsexynerd
You may be considered when the activity takes place next time... -
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I'd be glad to join.
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It's sooo hot in here. All sounds very tasty indeed..lol.
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My Souls Reflection
I can help release some of your heat. Wanna help?
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it's cute, and sexy, but i have a few problems with it, if you don't mind.
i realized you've been rhyming the whole thing, but! in this stnaza:
"I come on top
You underneath
My tongue explores
your lollipop."
"underneath" & "lolipop" don't rhyme....
and then these two lines:
"My tongue must dig
you further deep!"
makes no sense because you're missing a preposition before the "you". i mean, i understand you did it because it probably would throw off the flow because of syllables, but it just....i'm sorry. it happened to nag at me.
other than those two things, i thought you did an awesome job! very sex, and very cute. it's adorable, and sounds like a fun way to spend a day off from school. good luck in that contest you entered. <3
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this piece happen to fit you very well hon you are quite a woman i tell you passing by reading if that isn't a law good luck dear in the contest
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theredcatjazzoflove
You're such a sweet, kissable lady, honey!
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very hot i love it, i definitely wouldn't mind tasting
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SurrenderMyHeart
I want to taste you more than you want to taste me, sweet doll of mine!
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i am dancing to this song, i have a strong image in my mind of who else is dancing to this, i love it, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Disturbed Prodigy
Thank you. Thank you. Thank you!
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AHHHHH.......This is ummmmm... Hot girl whew!!! I love it
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hotchocolate
Hot girls love to taste a hot chocholate.
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lmao this is hot! anytime u wna fuck call me
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Christina luvs you
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lol yay
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Christina luvs you
The door is open for you. You need not knock. Just enter!
Ssh! No sounds. None should know. -
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lol of course not!
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Christina luvs you
Wanna be my permanent visitor, sweet neighbor? -
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id love to
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Christina luvs you
Sounds great!
My door and thighs are ever open for you, my secret lover! -
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hehe
and mine are open 4 u
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Christina luvs you
No more whispering, honey! People are getting suspicious. -
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okay lol
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