A single tear rolls off my cheek, dripping onto my nicotine scented hand
That same hand you promised to put a ring on
Mascara agony is inked on my pale face
Pink, soft lips wrap around the filter of a cigarette
Inhaling deeply as gray smoke flows out through my pretty little nose
The same nose you kissed and the same nose that scrunched when I giggled
Watching crumbling ash glow orange, fade to black, and hit the ground
The remnants blow away in the wind...just like our love
Paper and tobacco burn, dwindles down to nothing...just like the pieces of my broken heart
Youve burned me way too many times
Now the blemishes on my porcelain skin wont fade and the scars wont heal
Those same scars that you touched with your rough hands
Forever imprinted in my nostalgic memories are the days we spent together
I remember when we kissed...I can still feel you on my lips
Left me with a certain taste I refuse to forget
Every touch stung like something Ive waited my whole life to experience...now the only thing that touches me like that is my razor
Cutting me deep, cutting me gently just like your words
Damn we mustve smoked that whole pack, I was enticed by the lighters glow
Was so bright, almost like the enthusiasm in my big green eyes
I knew you always loved that about me...the way my face lit up and my mouth let out the simple words
I
Love
You
Now looking back on it, I gave more to the relationship than you ever could
You supplied the money and I supplied the sex, but I enjoyed every minute of it
Guess its true what they say, baby all good things really do come to an end
Romeo fell of his horse leaving not so sweet Juliet to fend for herself
In a castle of distress surrounded by a sea of sadness
Trying to escape the fate of sudden death, struggling to live through the days alone
You gave me so much in such a short period of time
Hope,
Love,
Patience,
And happiness
Only to rip it all away from me in the end
You never could live up to your empty meaningless words
My happiness was fake just like our relationship
But everything I felt was real
Just when we were starting to mend, your untruthful ignorance fueled the fire and we went up in flames
Do you even care if your lies are ruining my life?
When will you admit your flaws?
Plan on righting your wrongs?
Doesnt matter anyway because soon this pack of cigarettes will be gone...used up and thrown in the trash
Just like YOU
Author notes
"Flames to dust, lovers to friends, why do all good things come to an end?"
http://allpoetry.com/Christina%20-x-
A contest entry
- I want new favourites. by broken-colours.
400 points, ended December 2, 2008, 36 entries
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Honorable mention
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Hope you like it...if not well F**K you lol
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not bad, not bad. i know i havent commented on anything in a spell. came back to see what i have missed. it is a good write of poetry. while reading it i saw things that could be changed to make it more powerful read (if you want to know what i was thinking, send me a tell) as for the stanzas mentioned, i guess it could be broken into them, or simply centered could have an effect. pen on!!
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thanks lol i dont believe in breaking up my poems
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i liked this a lot. good job.
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thanks!
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thanks for the deeply moving piece
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hummm.... my only nick pick with this lovely write is that it isn't broken up into stanza's or even paragraphs. It reads like one long sentence to me. I didn't know when to pause... when to stress. Any of that kind of stuff.
However, the story itself is creative. Interesting. And you use imagery well. All in all a good write. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest. -
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thanks n sry when i wrote it i wasnt worried about tht stuff.
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nice babe you really did a very great job with this poem here you have really gotten creative with your style to good luck to you in the contest hon
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thank you, im glad u liked it.
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wow once again you pulled out another amazing poem, i love the flow and style of it and love the linking of the images to love and loss of it, its a great piece of work good luck in the contest x hope your ok
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aww thanks and yea im okay.
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o sweetie
...i love u
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i love you too babe.
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I love how you relate a lot of the images in the story to your love, crumpling up and blowing away in the wind like something that ended up insignificant. Didn't appreciate the reference to cutting, but you didn't go into detail so it's all right.
Really enjoyed this, even though it's not broken into stanzas. It doesn't matter, really; poems can be in any form as long as your emotions are conveyed the way you want them to. And I believe you accomplished that with this.
Great job!
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thank you so much, yea sry about the razor part it needed to be in there lol but ya like u said i didnt go into detail cuz of ur rules im glad u liked it and ya haha stanzas arent really my thing. thanks again i really do try to show my emotions to the best of my ability.
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