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(Work in progress)

I heard the news
and it struck me like,
like a dagger of ice
through my frozen heart.

A contest entry

When hope seems forever lost, how can it ever be recaptured?

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  • vampedvixen
    December 8, 2008
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    Ouch! I can really feel the vivid pain you paint in this poem. You've managed to capture a feeling in such detailed imagery that it makes the reader feel that emotion as well. Thank you very much for entering my contest. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future!


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    November 25, 2008
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    wooot tell me when its done sweetheart


  • Quabben
    November 24, 2008

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    Very Good

    Strong emotion, very strong. I think I would have said excellent if you had written a couple more lines. As I read this I was left a little unfulfilled, I needed just a little more to give me the whole. You got talent.