elastic spines, from dreams, wrap
like twist-ties
around bagged hope;
shoelaces undone, he fell
into the gutter
and now he lays
worthless as frayed wire, his mind
chained
with one weak link, breaking
and his magic fingers linger
temporarily
knotted
A contest entry
- Bend by Pamela A Lamppa.
1050 points, ended November 28, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Shoot.
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You have presented images that are hard realities to many. I wanted more in this one but with word limit, I understand. This is quite powerful and at the end I am asking...
What happened? What made this happen?
Excellent work. Thinking work. Valued work. Thank you for this amazing entry. Well done. ~Pamela
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omg
this is amazing, and just really takes off in the begining, and lets your mind feast on such fresh vivid ideas. liking elastic spines alot
i like alot of this alot
good luck and take care
Stephanie ♥
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this is kind of interesting, i think you did a great job on this, but call me back with you do the twinks, i wanna see what you do, keep it flowing
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its already done. the original was only 24 words long.
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Contest specs call for 40 words - no more no less.
Please feel free to add, tweak, or change.
I will be back.
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For some reason I read "40 words or less"
my bad XD I will see if I can add more before closing, if it is not completed by the time you judge, feel free to remove.
sorry
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