and you were gnashing your teeth
with the crossed arms of a giant
bent over my face in an awkward stance
my hands pressed in prayer
you ignored this last dance
yes, last.
you left-
me spinning in a solo
pirouette of second guesses.
Music and all its controlling
tendencies swore this tone deaf
mess didn't need you.
The base-
beat
of my heart broke threw
my chest and crushed you against the walls
but you didn't mind something you deserved
or so I told myself-
Your frame hung perfectly crooked;
Glossy smiles gleam through cracked glass
blinding anyone with open eyes-
Luckily,
I've been asleep for months
Author notes
I will miss you...
A contest entry
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700 points, ended December 6, 2008, 24 entries
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Comments
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Very interesting.
-Siobhan
Fave lines:
Music and all its controlling
tendencies swore this tone deaf
mess didn't need you.
The base-
beat
of my heart broke threw
my chest and crushed you against the walls
but you didn't mind something you deserved
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gnashing
made me think of gaints and then i read the next line
lol
i like it very much
=]]
and i think that
me spinning in a solo
pirouette of second guesses.
Music and all its controlling
tendencies swore this tone deaf
mess didn't need you.
is my fav part
=]
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amazing
love it
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