A long day at work, it was finally done,
boss asked me to stay, I had to say no.
Packed up all my tools, sorry, I have to run,
her plane lands in two hours, I need to go.
Have to shower, shave, for a special someone,
got right on the road, but the traffic was slow.
Talked on the phone for a year, it's time to meet,
to feel her touch for real, will make me complete.
Heart beating faster with each passing minute,
the anticipation making me nervous.
Butterflies in my stomach just would not quit,
it has been so long, it's hard to adjust.
This love , so natural, I have to admit,
that tonight she and I, will become "us"
Cut myself shaving, my hand's shaking so bad,
I was as jumpy as a blushing bride's Dad..
She stepped off the plane looking tired and worn,
a more beautiful sight I have never seen.
Dragging a bag behind her, a little forlorn,
I saw nothing but a passionate Queen.
She is my Texas Rose, complete with thorns,
looking better than a Dalton Figurine.
She stopped, looking around and our eyes met,
the look of love I saw there, I'll never forget.
Rushing on over, took her right in my arms,
the luggage hit the floor, purse flew through the air.
My chest pressed up tight against her ample charms,
kissing her strongly, deeply, with a French flair.
The fire ignited, set off smoke alarms,
we needed to get the hell out of there.
Hand in hand we walked quickly to the car,
once inside it, we didn't get very far.
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Hands started roaming as soon as the doors closed,
divesting each other of restraining clothes.
Naked, pressed together, feeling bodies heat,
tongues twirl madly, a dance of animal lust.
The stick shift in the way, into the back seat,
mouth fastens greedily on a willing bust .
Never have I tasted anything so sweet,
climbing on my lap, was inside in one thrust.
Urgent as the first time was, we took it gently,
when she whispered in my ear "please make love to me".
Gazing in her eyes, kissed her chastely on the lips,
moving slowly inside, kissing swan-like neck, ear.
A heady wine was she, I took in precious sips,
fingers trailing sides to thighs, holding tight her rear.
Deep inside I flex, she gasps, slowly moving hips,
moaning with deep pleasure, impaled on my spear.
Pace had to quicken as windows slowly fogged up,
tongue and lips gently nibbling a 46DDD cup.
Nails dug into my back, my hands gripped her ass,
she rode with quiet intent now, a growl deep within.
Two skyrockets at apex, waiting for the blast,
hovering in timelessness, where the air is thin.
Grinding hard and gripping, hands streaking foggy glass,
we release as one, together, making our heads spin.
Reality intrudes slowly, bodies pressed tight,
what a wonderful way to start our first night.
Oh, by the way, welcome to Ohio.
Author notes
Love you Tory. 
This one's for you.
I used the suggested rhyme scheme for the first four Octaves,
for the culmination of the poem, the last three, I reversed the rhyme scheme.
I wanted a different pace, did it work for you?
Ottava Rima
A Ottava Rima is a poem written in 8-line octaves. Each line is of a 10 or 11 syllable count in
the following rhyme:
one octave poem. abababcc
two octave poem. abababcc, dededeff
three octave poem. abababcc, dededeff, ghghghii
...so on and so on
In a list
A contest entry
- HOT, SENSUAL, EROTIC! by My Souls Reflection.
700 points, ended December 10, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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46DDD?
Wow, that would be uncomfortable.
Great poem, well written.
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WOW!
You bet it was worth posting!
Making love in the car, fogging up the windows...very erotic...only heat can do that!
I love the sense of urgency in this piece...it seems it was worth the long wait for such a passionate union.
Thanks for your entry!
Annie
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Seductive
Sounds like a hard day at the office ended in fine fashion. Very sensual and provided ample imagery so the mind could stay focused on the story. great form poetry and great form poetry.
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lovely and passionate, as only you can describe, good luck
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sorry had a distraction here before i could write, but that is what happened while i was reading too...i felt completely distracted like my thoughts were in a busy place in Ohio...
... very well done here...PK
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A sweet, sincere and sultry piece of life poetry, you ask if it was worth posting, yes you are being creative and care enough about your Lady to share the love. A torrid passion for Tori in the togetherness of Ohio. Now, that's a Thanksgiving!
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I live in Ohio... never thought Ohio was that exciting, lol
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That was beautiful. Strange thing tho. It started out EXACTLY how my story goes. I am from Cali and the love of my life from Ohio. That was REALLY funny. He was in Florida tho for school. We had talked on the phone for months and became best friends. I decided to just go to Florida and visit and I fell head over heels. All the butterflies you felt and all you wrote up to the point of her getting off the plane was almost exact for him as well.
The rest of the story you have here was very sensual. That part of my story I shall keep a secret.
Thanks for the beautiful piece!!!
vampi
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Only one word for this
WOW!
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Wow
This is very good... I enjoyed reading it totally. It draws your mind in quickly to the story and keeps you focused. well done...
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Certainly hot and passionate!
Interesting reversal of the rhyming, and all the best
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Nice Gris. Nice. gets me going at this late hour after I took my sleeping pill LOL. This is just like it must havebeen. filled with passion, fast and furious though satisfying. good job
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