I could'nt bare the pain when you left
the cold floor underneath my feet
sent a chill throughout my body
grasping for your warmth that left me cold...
Was my beauty not profound enough to keep you
For I cannot change your hearts direction
even beauty cannot hold a mans heart
so I wait, while the rain hides my tears...
Tears that could have filled seas upon oceans
Waiting for your love to return back to me
I was a flower lost in the hurricane of your memory
memorys that over ruled my common sence...
I could not live, tortured by your absence
So as you hold my lifeless body
that was drained of all hope
you whisper into unconcious ears
I'm sorry...
You were the best I ever had...
A contest entry
- the best i ever had by adsaige.
400 points, ended December 4, 2008, 8 entries
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Comments
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This is a deeply saddened write. I can see how the prompt inspired it. This write can be edited, I did notice some spelling and grammatical errors.
Thank you for entering. Good Luck.
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aww amazing, beautifully written, sad piece that hits you right in the heart.
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thank you love
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wow..very powerful peice..amazing job
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Thank you angel
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there sadness of this poem is overflowing, it hits you as you read from start to finish, strong needing words that reach out for someone, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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thank you..
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