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Liquid Slitting Stare

Better I left
But for a moment I just couldn't
figure her out

Back to me
She seemed so free
staring down the hall


Grease banging uniform taps
I looked over my shoulder for a moment
Sirens singing their accusatory tune

I looked back
she was gone

Nothing to say to that
Just a moment to wonder if it was
worth it

the tissue
the look
the smile
the conversation

that was all before the fall

then came being broken
fingers and toes first
a relief from when she dug out
my heart

Her hands colored the kind of red
That comes from a fool that bled
When there was nothing in it
for him

Walking in step was never my joe
And neither was playing games
But I stayed anyway
Even when I should have
let go

Because of the look in her eyes

And that fact that she cheated to win.

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The prompt http://dhyali.deviantart.com/art/Alone-56472997 by dhyali

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  • ForgottenMemories
    December 13, 2008

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    woah, this really got to me.
    I don't know how to explain how this really made me feel, but it was so real and straight forward.
    This to me was an exeptional write considering the picture you were given, and I really liked what came out
    Thanks for entering and good luck!
    -ForgottenMemories