muted in smoky blue
mountains sing softly, in
no
hurry
to kiss
the mist
goodbye
Author notes
prompt..morning songs
A contest entry
- morning songs by Nicolette.
1400 points, ended December 6, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this piece is quite poetic...concise and ephemeral
if it were mine, i would change mountain to plural and sings to singular, thereby creating a larger environment...if you know what i mean. lol
thank you for this poignant entry
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i was thinking small, my own little world..you make a good point, i'll edit..thanks
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Wonderful brevity here without losing anything regarding beauty, impact and poetic quality! I liked this, and even though I'm not very fond of poetry that seems to "drift" across the page, somehow I think it works here.
Really a lovely "image or snap-shot quality" about this poem! Thank you for a lovely entry.
~ Nicolette
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Simply beautiful. I love your verse. Excellent. ~Pamela 
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very nice..
Love the imagery, and how utterly serene this piece feels.
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thanks you
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You're a clever poet. Wonderful imagery!
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Thanks
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Smoke in the hills..mist shrouded mountains
Applachian scenes...I see it. I'm just down from you a bit but I do see it out my window often.
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omg i just read tara's in this...
thank god i wasn't thinking of entering..
lol
this is beautiful and well you both should move in together and put your trophies up on the mantle!
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oh, god hers is so good, i hope she wins.
lol..i might have room to squeeze mine in..
you should join us .. oh, Tarrrr aaaa..how do you feel about roomies?
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i love the 'image' quality of this, so gorgeous, i love short, 'mood' poems like this best of luck the title sets up the scene nicely...
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lol..thanks
this one's been through the wringer, lol -
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well, it's beautiful, i love it, i love porches
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nice tight thought poem.
gives a good effect.
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you caught a quiet moment and put it on the page (:
I enjoyed this moment here.
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thanks
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This seems like a lingering moment of trying to remember what it looks like when you are gone...
I like the descent of words and the way you formatted them. Love the opening line as well as I sit with mug in hand.
[time for silent reflections
as the coffee warms my hands]this is what I would change...just from the feel I got
*hug*
you *rock*
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yep..i miss it already
but..who knows maybe i'll like the next place even more
thanks for the suggestion .. i'll mull it over for awhile
you rock!
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so serene!
I love mornings like these...this is a beautiful, morning song
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thanks
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Nice morning view. A cup of java just makes it better. Just add a poem by you-heaven.
Joe
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love felix
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