As shame envelopes his body,
his heart and soul do wilt
Falling from the grace he felt,
to the house that Satan built
A metamorphosis from good to bad,
bears the weight of heavy steel
The beauty that once covered him,
has dried and now does peel
He kneels before his one betrothed,
with forgiveness on his mind
She resurrects their once true love,
but now days it is blind
The sins that brought him all his shame,
are ones of wanton lust
Misguided deeds and lowly acts,
have destroyed any trust
Though she forgives transgressions past,
he never will be whole
For thoughts of what he’s done to her,
live on forever in his soul
A gentle word before she’s gone,
an easing of his pain
To pray he will be healed someday,
and goodness he’ll regain
Author notes
5. http://www.daoine-sidhe.org/galeries/img/Luis%20Royo/Fallen%20Angel.jpg
A contest entry
- Angels and Darkness by colie50.
625 points, ended December 6, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Ooh my but this is so well done!
The transition between good and evil...what a fine line and you wrote of it so well!
Congratulations on the gold trophy and thank you so much for entering this into my contest! -
An excellent tale told, flow and rhyme are spot on. Loved the imagery portrayed, beautifully done. All the best in the contest
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Wow. You really took the prompt and created something I never expected to see. This is excellent! It was a very creative take on the prompt, with a powerful underlying message. Beautifully penned! Good luck in my contest ^^
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There's a powerful underlying message here. You've added much depth to the picture with your words. Well done and best of luck to you in the contest.
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I loved the pic!
I wanted to write for this contest but couldn't find an inspiration.
"A metamorphosis from good to bad,
bears the weight of heavy steel
The beauty that once covered him,
has dried and now does peel."
That's what I missed, an insight into the picture that you found. That stanza sets the whole poem. Well done, poet.
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What an awesome story to go with this picture! Wonderful! Love the flow and rhyme in this.
All the best in the contest
Gaylene
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good write and tight rhythm. killer pic.
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This Is just great, It so suited the picture, and the whole thing just flowed
Well done and all the best In the contest
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