And I am back in childhood
as long as memories last
until enough footsteps have come and gone
making a path for me ~
and upon the snow
silence fills my head
after I leave the window
where a verse of youth
perched on a distant branch
in an evergreen dress
wears itself
upon my skin
only a few spaces in between
Author notes
Sitting on Boulders at Deep Cove
we unwrap daybreak
like an unexpected gift
our bodies so close we feel each other's thoughts
our mouths exhale horizon
sun folds her wings
her warmth sleeping in the heart of wood
- Darlene Spong Henderson
A contest entry
- morning songs by Nicolette.
1400 points, ended December 6, 2008, 22 entries
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i like how you chose winter over summer in opposition to the prompt's poem, and how you touched on the distance we all feel between our past, present, and future selves
most people think in terms of "I", but the truth is, we are "we"
thanks for this intriguing entry
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This is lovely poetry and I especially liked the weave of natural and human qualities here...nature is indeed the best metaphor for human emotions. There is a soft nostalgia about this poem that really speaks to me.
"verse of youth" - loved that line! I really liked this poem... thank you for this lovely entry.
~ Nicolette
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nice expression . . good luck in the contest !!
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"until enough footsteps have come and gone
making a path for me ~" - I love how you take a cliche idea and refresh it. Beautifully written poem!! I love it
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exquisite
marvellous write from an experienced poet, pleasure to read, great imagery, full of life, well done -
Just so soft and beautifully written. I really don't know what else to say other then the imagery is excellent and the poem was too. Thank you for sharing with me. Oh the precious memory of a sweet child..
Blessings,
Much Love
Kelle Marie
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This is beautifully penned...the imagery leaves that feeling of innocense...like the way the beauty of morning entrances. lovely penning!
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one word, beautiful!!
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Yes, Yes...
This is a verse wrapped in you and gifted to the world, very nicely done!
bj
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