A dream on the horizon;
The trouble is:
Its image plagues your sight,
Haunts your waking thoughts,
Yet remains beyond reality.
The setting sun stains it,
Fragmented shadows conceal it,
You cannot grasp it.
The night eclipses it,
The moon flaunts it,
The stars mock its meaning.
You turn your back on it,
But its remnants stare at you,
You are masked by its light.
The morning offers no reprieve,
It just illuminates the dream,
Captures you in its brilliance,
Teases you with ephemeral rapture,
Dances away on a fleeting breeze.
It leaves you with bitter silence,
With a heart that has lost purpose,
A voice with a requiem to sing.
A dream on the horizon;
The trouble is:
It’s a nightmare disguised by the light.
Author notes
Wrote it in about ten minutes because I had sudden inspiration x] didn't think it'd even go anywhere at first, but then I kept writing... and I like it *nodnodnod*.
Honest opinions please!
Purple!
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Love it!
Inspired I havent wrote in so long,your peom is the first i stoped to read on my fav list and you did not dissapoint,i often dream and yet i awake from the thought of something better and see it was all a nightmare a horrible thing a dream is.
Thank you for this wright!Allowed my depression a small glympse into the reality that haunts me!
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You are such a beautiful young writer Nephy, I am so happy to know you
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i like it a lot. its short and sweet, and unlike a lot of poems on here, wasnt work to read. a lot of poems are so long they are like reading a novel, and you can express emotion without writing a ton. i really like it a lot and i like how you state things, and use words that not a lot of people use, like requiem. the last stanza was amazing.
GREAT WRITE NEHPY
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*nods with* WOW.
Gods, Again, how do you do that?!
Beautiful!
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Hunni.
This was powerful, like...they...said. 
This is a poem where it creates an image in your head as you read it. Very..Deep. IloveitGirl. Rock on!
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It's a powerful piece Elizabeth. It speaks to the many of us who have dreams yet are lost and are trying to find our way.
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I absolutely love the personification on this one:
"The night eclipses it,
The moon flaunts it,
The stars mock its meaning."
This is my favorite stanza. This write is very well put together, and I love the idea that encompasses it. I love the ending as well, a lovely little twist on things.
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This has a amazing feeling of suspence/creepy/dark feeling. Something that has one thinking in the back of their mind. I love the trance that the poem gives me. Great job!
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No writers block
I don't have writers block as of now so I will just add for Negatoreyfan has her back against the wall seeing out and she gives Jesus a Challenge hey Jesus o I can tell you this is not Yours. Will you find me Yours again I know the darkness has within has now blackened dimm the outside lights.=o I'll be patient negatoreyfan's words sewed together by Jesus Christ in the form of her thoughts-stand it is her light-shine so sum it up nobody knows the glory this brings
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this is really good sisshyness and the background is so appropriate for the poem. keep up the good work and know that I love you and that if you ever need anything let me know! *hug
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Like every poem, it has that.. special something
It's like a Nephlim Touch!
Kind of a creeeeeepy poem though, but anything you make is amazing. Keep up the poems!! Write happier ones, though xD
-Paril
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