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It’s killing me

I think it will destroy me,
It’s hard enough as it is.
Cutting me from the inside,
They say ignorance is bliss.

It runs in the blood inside me,
Burning every single vein.
I need that flow of emotion,
To help release the pain.

That soul is my connection,
To the world on the other side.
I need that soul more than ever,
But their heart has long ago died.

That face I’ll never see again,
Will forever live in me.
Burning, cutting, reminding,
I will forever love thee.

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  • Sunkissed xo
    December 4, 2008

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    Well done Taz.
    The intensity of this is amazing, it has a really strong, steady rhythm, and when coupled with that brilliant ending line, "I will forever love thee", creates a literary masterpiece. Well done! Thanks so much for entering the contest
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  • Sunkissed xo
    November 24, 2008
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    AMAZING!
    You write like a pro! There is so much emotion in this, you express yourself so nicely.
    WELL DONE


  • Lady Michaella
    November 24, 2008

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    Taz I love this poem. Who cares if its dark n cutting? Cuz i love it. so keep writing this way, cuz the flow and rhyme are absolutely amazing!!!!
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