your wings flutter as you lie in crimson,
stabbed to death with your own arrows;
i'm sorry it had to end like this.
i'm sorry i never knew you.
Author notes
Wheee...
For those who don't know, Eros was the Greek god of love. He was the one in charge of actually making people fall in love, while his mother Aphrodite... I dunno. Sat around, got upset randomly, and shagged people all day?
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Succinct and emotional.
Which is pretty much what poetry should be, yeah?
Anyway, I liked this.
And the author's notes made me giggle.
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-grins- Thank you.
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wow.. that made me think.. good job!
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Thank you!
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This breaks my heart.
The end of something is the begining of nothing sometimes.
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Thank you. -smiles and gives jelly baby-
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so few words and let the imagery is great, giving the reader a rapt view ... although the picture is a bit grim. thank you for entering
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Well, it would be somewhat gloomy. Thank you.
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Awww this is so sad. So expressive though and heartwarming. I know how it feels though to never truly get that special time with someoen we want.
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Thankies! -gives jelly baby-
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Wow. Short, but intense.
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Thanks. -grin-
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