The only reason grass is green
is bouncing somewhere in between
an object’s surface properties
and quantities of waves you squeeze
between two points where light is seen.
The green could easily be red
if just one trillion hertz were shed
and mailed off to the Red Chinese
to do with as they damn well please,
and thousands in Tibet are dead.
A contest entry
- Imagine The Green Is Red by polly filla.
700 points, ended December 9, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Roses are red, violets are blue... by albymyheart.
1000 points, ended February 15, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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A well thought poem using colour in a unique descriptive way. This pre-write is a bit off track from the prompt, but well worth the read. Thank you for entering...alby
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gosh Pat, i am certain amazed at yer wizardry. yer last line is so good, and yer first line is so good ... yer flow is like the wind through a concrete wall and yer rhyme scheme is certainly subtle and all that. I like the way each word clangs out like a cowbell and stuff. I am so glad you are here on the same planet with my old tree. It is very lonely. I hope you write more good stuff like this and all that. it is not very often i get to read such musical star craft. I have a pet turtle. I am fond it. I like this poem as well as all get out. Gosh.
yer friend, Moqui
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Biting Satire
Rhymes are natural and unforced.
First stanza is delightfully understandable physics, and a perfect poem on its own.
Second stanza is exceedingly wry.
Those one trillion hertz could be best used on an Aegis ship I would guess.
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whoaaa
this was a pure blunt piece, i like the way the truth spaces from here to there, thanks for sharing and best wishes!
voe
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Oh, this is nice.
It sounds very scientific, and bouncy.
Although the message at the end isn't so nice.
It's very misleading, clever, brilliant!
Great job, keep it up.
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I like this, it moves with assurance and bounce, and the after-thought resonates. Nice questioning of physics and lightwaves; eyes are adapted to such a small part of the spectrum of possibilities. The second stanza seems to say, so is the human heart.
Great response to the prompt.
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if black was lily -white
and white was burundi- black
and green grass was bled-red
the dread of the saffron-dead
would glow with purple pain
and shine inside the prism
of madmen's mind's.
We need light to see the dark
You just lit countless candles
Kudos
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"Dread of the safron-dead" is a deft touch. Thank you.
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splendid
ok....i am such a nerd so i obviously enjoyed the science of it...but i also like the political sense that i get from it when you mention the chinese...lol...also like the question you asked in your author notes...very intense and realy gets the brain a going...well keep up the good work and again i really liked this piece...
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Thanks. I really enjoy delving into quantum mechanics in poetic form--so much more fun than struggling with the math.
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very thought provoking thank you!
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gosh, now you say it...
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I like the way you ask can you imagine? after the poem is read. No, I can't really.
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