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one by four the breeze
loosens wings from tall white limbs
butterflies in flight
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five by ten the winds
scatter yellow shades of brown
silent through the air
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more by many gusts
flurry golden buri fans
lightly to the loam
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loved sum totaly
really good / I liked them.
question? I read somewhere,that a senryu' was like a bad haiku, because though it has the same 3 line form of 5,7,5 - nature is not the essence / rather the relationship of man & woman with a touch of ironic sarcasim.
Do you have any other references?
donn(Z)
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Decided to do a little digging. I think this article clarifies the matter nicely enough:
HAIKU OR SENRYU?
HOW TO TELL THE DIFFERENCE
Glad you enjoyed these, Donn. Nice to hear from you.
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Erin
E=mc2
Excellence = mediocrity x creativity squared
Beautiful birch !
Got your e-mail via Mochin...thanks!
Happy Thanksgiving !
John
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Yea I never really noticed them until I came to live in a house right near a small stand. They are lovely trees.
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Love it! How you flowed each piece together, even though each haiku is a great poem on it's own. Nice work
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Glad you enjoyed. Somehow I find I like trying to write small sets of haiku that interlock in various ways.
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