My mind is a body of water
Deep like the Atlantic, with just as much power and rage
Tears escape my eyes as I let out a shaky breath.
Sorrow, like waves wash over me.
Filling my soul.
Black waters rush and crash into me,
My soul crying out.
In a desperate urged to be loved.
Forever.
The unnerving thought of not having that.
Kicks and scratches at my heart.
Wanting to burst into shards at the mournful awareness.
I don't want to be alone for eternity.
I long for Endless Love
A contest entry
- Love Everlasting by Vars.
650 points, ended December 2, 2008, 17 entries
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Constructive criticism please...
Comments
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nice job! i really like this poem. its short and sweet and simple. Its also a bit sad though
good luck in the contest!
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Perfect!
This is just as beautiful as you.
So many vivid images are rushing through my mind. And I love it. And you.
I feel the same exact way.
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It. Very very grand, love. ^__^
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Hunni. This.. Was deep, adn sad, and ...Amazing. Very deep, has a lot of emotion put into.
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