I want to ask you not to cry;
To wipe unshed tear from your eye
As you kneel at my grave so carefully tended
Attempting to soothe your heart
Until it’s mended.
The burdens will leave, but dropping slow
Sneaking through twilight and then you’ll know
The certainty of guilt released, and immense
Gratitude of peace.
Weep not for me for I am free
Through kind actions of your own.
By admitting defeat, and thinking of me,
Your love has sent me home.
All that you want now; and all that you pray
Is to have something I cannot be.
For you are living, and I am but a spirit,
Twinkling in another world;
Now that you’ve set me free…
So wipe those tears from grief-filled gaze
And think to newer, brighter days.
We will meet again, of that no fear,
So gather your courage; and banish that tear.
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By Moya Muldowney, 20
24th October 2006
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This is very touching indeed great rhyme and flow with a strong message that comes through quite clearly to me the reader.
I like it, I like it so!
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Letting go of what is loved most..
the decision to do so...
the sacrifice made so unselfishly...
A truly beautiful piece of poetry.
Souls await us lass.
Peace,
Liam
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Very Touching
I did not read to critique your writing.. I recently had a very dear man friend pass away - this has great meaning for me..Thank you for allowing me to read it.
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ahhh nice flow but such a sad poem ...
till we meet again
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Beautifully written. This is an amazing write. It reminds me of that poem, I can't remember what it's called or who wrote, that ends in "Do not cry for me, For I did not die" or something like that
Either way, you have talent
Well done,
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Wow... That was amazing. Your such an amazing poet. That was perfect.
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*doesn't know what to say and is emotionally moved by your words*
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oh shush you
yera... it's a bit unstable and the lines need fixing up here and there but hopefully .. it'll work out ok in the end, whenever i get around to working on it
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I love this...
These are great words for people to read who have lost a loved one, for this is what they would most likely be saying.
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thank you for commenting
the truth about this is that it was actually written in relation to a pet, but a few have said to be since that they find it could be applied to humans also; if it helps people in some way, then i'm happy
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bittersweet poem
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thank you for your comment
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Fantastic...
Honest, heartfelt & sincere in its delivery with a strong narrative & an intriguing rhyme scheme that flowed seamlessly...
Another great write...
Well done!!!
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Cheers dude, as always, the comments are appreciated
I think some of hte lines are a little unstable, just haven't figured out how to even them up yet... but i'l get there hopefully
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Very interesting, excellent, well written poem. Never read anything like it before. Very bright and hope filled message.
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thank you Ellis; this was actually written as though it was coming from the thoughts of Bambi, my beloved cat now go to the Bridge. Many people think it was for humans, but if it works both ways, then I am happy
hope you are well
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if there is any hope,,,its always we will meet again . lovely ..peter
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Peter - I couldn't have said that better myself, what an eloquent way to word it!
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I am in love with this poem. It is so heart felt and sincere. So tranquil but still overflowing with emotion. Aboslutely beautiful
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thank you so much for the lovely response
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wow. this is such a strong write. it's pretty hopeful too. very inspirational to many. i really like the structure and the words you've used. they flow so well. beautiul, i loved it. keep penning, and keep the faith alive
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very powerful. This is so well spoken and written sis!!! You truly did an excellent job!!! I love the way that you portrayed this piece!!!
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