you have become too
tired
to waste away,
catherine
confusion leaks
from your brittle skin
as you rock yourself calm
and i do not hold you
like i did before.
i only send you flowers
for your bedside table
to make your head feel better
in the morning.
A contest entry
- Portrait Poetry - Female by Polaja.
1400 points, ended December 19, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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your poetry is addictive
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Brilliant, sweet, and poignant almost.
Your style is incredibly addicting.
[I've got a lot of free time at the moment, so I'll probably be looking through a lot of your poems.]
Congratulations on the gold; it was well-deserved.
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Thank you for entering my contest with this poem
I love the addition of the name "catherine" almost as an afterthought to the first stanza - it adds a certain distance, almost weariness, to the tone of the poem that is taken up by the following stanzas very powerful!
Keep writing
Polly
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beautiful simplicty. i really feel like most people have lost that in poems and i try very hard to keep it that way myself but you seem to have done it effortlessly. thank you for sharing <3
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