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Thoughts of a horse sent away

i was there for you when no one else cared.
i helped you smile when you thought you never would again.
but when i missed one jump,
you sent me away.
i was no longer worthy,
i missed a jump.
you wanted a champ,
even if it meant sending away your best friend.
and i wasn't a champ any more.
then one day as you are in my old stable readying it for the new mare,
you look back at all of my ribbons,medals,and trophies.
you realized i was your champ,but just not yet.
then you saw my name in the paper as best in show.
you came down to the stables today.
"hey girl" you croon.
i dismiss you with a snort.
"hey it's me,your best bud!" you cry out.
i dismiss you with a flick of my neck.
fine you think,

she is only a worthless mare.

but still deep in your heart you are sorry you sent me away.

you tried to get me back,

but i didn't want to go.

you know why?

because you saw that i needed help but you weren't willing to give it to me.

so you tried to beat it into me.

but know i am in first place.

thinking back about you.

he left me in my time of need. i was there for him,but when i asked for help he sent me away.all well.i'm the best.i beat him.

but still you mourn thinking,why did i send her away?

now you cry,

tears pouring down your cheeks like rain in a storm.

but i dismiss you just as you have done to me.

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  • SeptemberFaith
    January 9

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    This is sad, but not the kind of sad that would make me cry. You still write a very convincing story of the seperation and saddness that comes with it.

    Bravo,
    Criss