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unshakable

Pain and sorrow
never shake .
Hopes  and desires
shape me

Author notes

Describe yourself once more in 10 words { The best of 4 rounds }

A contest entry

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  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    November 24, 2008

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    "Hopes and desires
    shape me"

    I have to agree with the lady down there, I think these words are lovely
    A very nice take on yourself,
    I thank you for it.

    I wish you the best of luck with your entry
    and thank you for entering.

    Claire x


  • luna-midnight gold member
    November 23, 2008
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    this is very well written, fortified
    good luck and take care


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 23, 2008
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    "hope and desires shape me" lovely write


  • everyone1 gold member
    November 23, 2008

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    Oh Yes!


    Very profound ... and evidently true ...

    This is without doubt, for me unaquivicibly so ...

    Great write!

    Bravo!

    ~ James ~

  • davidwright silver member
    November 23, 2008
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    Very nice. Good luck in the contest and happy trails.

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